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1Tengai Clan Empty Tengai Clan on Mon Jul 07, 2014 8:32 am

Kozai




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Symbol: Tengai Clan Shade_Symbol_by_Xildaen


Clan: Tengai

Kekkei Genkai: Heat Enervation

Elements: Katon|Raiton|Inferno Tengai Clan 35px-Nature_Icon_Scald.svg

Specialization: Ninjutsu

Location: Konohagakure

Clan History: In the ancient days, the masters of fire sought to increase their power in order to accomplish their various goals. One in particular, the Tengai clan, deserted basic fire entirely in favor of infusing their katon with raiton.
They noticed that raiton contained more energy and higher cutting power than katon, so combining it in a kekkei genkai made sense to them. As they were about to unleash their power on the world, however, a rival clan unleashed a biological weapon on them, which placed a viroid into their genetic code. This created a genetic bottleneck, wiping out much of the clan and limiting its population overall.
As a result, there are very few remaining members of the clan.

Kekkei Genkai Description: The user's inferno element have a suppressing aura of heat around them, causing it to drain energy from the target. When such a jutsu that the user casts comes into contact with another entity, that target loses chakra equal to the amount of chakra that the user expended to cast the jutsu.
As such, Inferno Release does no physical damage, i.e. it does not blast or push objects. Instead, it merely depletes chakra.
As a combination of katon and raiton, it is particularly weak to earth release, and strong against water release. Note that the user's body is weak to suiton, but not the element itself.
Inferno element ranks up with the lowest ranking element of the user's two basic elements.
Drawbacks:
- Must take Born Ill as a SC without balancing it with a positive SC.
- If the user uses more than one Inferno Element jutsu in the same post, their body becomes unable to handle it (even if the jutsu would not damage the user directly). The clan member will receive 1st degree burns, and each consecutive post, if the user still uses an Inferno Element jutsu, the severity of burns will increase a degree.  
- Clan members must take Hesitation (specialization) without balancing it with a positive SC.
- Suiton (and any element containing suiton) jutsu also deal a +1 rank in damage to the user.
- Cannot learn any other elements outside of raiton, katon, and inferno.

Members:
Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:

Name: Hell's Revelation
Canon/Custom:Custom
Rank:C
Type:Sensory
Element:Fire
Range:25m
Specialty:Ninjutsu
Duration:4 posts
Cooldown:Posts used + 1
Description:The user is able to sense heat signatures instead of chakra signatures. This occurs within the range of the jutsu, within which the user senses heat as if it were thermal imaging, in addition to being able to see normally. Even if the user's eyes are close, or if he is blind (naturally or by jutsu) he is still able to sense heat around him.

Name:Inferno Release: Collapsing Cataclysm
Canon/Custom:Custom
Rank:A
Type:Offensive
Element:Inferno
Range:30m radius
Specialty:Ninjutsu
Duration:1 post
Cooldown:6 posts
Description:Creates a ring of fire 10 meters high and 2 inches thick 30 m away from the user, which then collapses in at 40 m/s; it does not damage the user. Handseals for the jutsu are rat-tiger-boar.



Last edited by Kozai on Thu Jul 17, 2014 11:02 am; edited 21 times in total

2Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Mon Jul 07, 2014 1:28 pm

Kozai




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This is finished.

3Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Mon Jul 07, 2014 3:04 pm

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Invisible fire is a straight up no under any circumstances.


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Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

4Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Tue Jul 08, 2014 9:03 am

Kozai




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Edited, changed out the bloodline.

5Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Tue Jul 08, 2014 10:47 am

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If I were to even begin considering this, only the advanced element would be able to affect chakra. It isn't adding additional effects to standard katon. Also, it would need SUBSTANTIALLY more drawbacks.


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Tengai Clan BIgWlMn:10

Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

6Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Tue Jul 08, 2014 10:58 am

Kozai




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Changed the bloodline. How many drawbacks would be appropriate for this sort of bloodline? o.o

7Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 09, 2014 11:11 am

Kozai




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Added additional and more severe drawbacks.

8Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 09, 2014 11:21 am

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-The Hyouton weakness doesn't count for much. It's too niche. It won't impact you at all against 99% of opponents. When I said substantial drawbacks, I meant something that will regularly give you an active disadvantage.

-Being unable to learn suiton doesn't count for anything. If you intend to make this an advanced element you would be completely unable to learn elements not related to your advanced element to begin with. That's a requirement for these kinds of kkg.

-Also a requirement for advanced elements is taking the hesitant (specialization) SC without a counterbalance.


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Tengai Clan BIgWlMn:10

Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

9Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 09, 2014 11:54 am

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Edited as requested.

10Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 09, 2014 12:03 pm

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You'd be better off removing the mention of not being able to learn suiton and the additional damge from hyoton altogether, and just make it so that clan members take additional damage from suiton and all elements that derive from it.

I'm assuming that the advanced element does absolutely zero damage other than the chakra brun, correct? It's not getting real damamge and equal cost chakra burn.

Also, if you intend to make in an advanced element, you will need to list it's elemental advantages and weaknesses.

11Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 09, 2014 12:49 pm

Kozai




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Edited, hopefully to satisfaction.

12Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 09, 2014 2:34 pm

Hayato

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Once again, this time regarding the elemental resistances and weaknesses, matching it only against advanced elements is not adequate. Normal elements need to have counter play.

13Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Thu Jul 10, 2014 9:03 am

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Counter-play has been edited.

14Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Fri Jul 11, 2014 3:25 pm

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Bump

15Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Sat Jul 12, 2014 11:12 am

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"Note that the user's body is weak to suiton, but not the element itself."

Can you clear that line up a bit? I'm not really sure what you're trying to say there. Other than that, this is starting to come into form.


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Tengai Clan BIgWlMn:10

Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

16Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Sun Jul 13, 2014 4:20 pm

Kozai




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Just a small clarification there, sorry if it confused you. In the drawbacks, I stated that the user is weak to suiton, but that Inferno itself is strong against water.

17Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Sun Jul 13, 2014 4:51 pm

Hayato

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Regarding the elemental matchups, you can remove the "when defending" part. The matchups are just uniform.

18Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Mon Jul 14, 2014 9:15 am

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Edited.

19Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Mon Jul 14, 2014 6:22 pm

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Lol just remove the parts about +/- 1's entirely. Elemental advantage is sufficient.

You can also only have one S-Rank or scaling jutsu included in your clan jutsu. One of those two needs to be removed or reworked.


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Tengai Clan BIgWlMn:10

Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

20Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Tue Jul 15, 2014 8:16 am

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Edited.

21Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 16, 2014 9:55 am

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And I'm assuming that the reason that gas like substance you are creating with your last jutsu is because it just burns chakra. It's not like, a flammable substance to be combined with other jutsu?


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Tengai Clan BIgWlMn:10

Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

22Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 16, 2014 9:59 am

Kozai




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As stated in the elemental properties, this is just a heated gas that burns tissue and chakra, but doesn't really have any force behind it, i.e. it can't be used to blast or push things back.

23Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Wed Jul 16, 2014 9:43 pm

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Any damage that a jutsu does has to be explicated, although I thought we agreed that these inferno jutsu are incapable of dealing physical damage.


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Tengai Clan BIgWlMn:10

Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

24Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Thu Jul 17, 2014 8:56 am

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Explicated in what manner? As in, "what kind of burns it causes" and so on and so forth?

If you would like me to take out all physical damage, I will.

25Tengai Clan Empty Re: Tengai Clan on Thu Jul 17, 2014 10:14 am

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Your elements (since it is an advanced element) should be written as: Katon|Raiton|Inferno

As with all kkg, its rank will be equivalent to the lowest ranking of your two base elements. Please include that in the kkg description.

In your drawbacks, just explicate that since it is an advanced element clan, they may not learn other elements.

Also, give the sensory jutsu a duration and a cooldown.


____

Tengai Clan BIgWlMn:10

Tengai Clan Ew2E7Un
"Good and evil are just words. It is not my place to judge their worthiness."

Character Bio | Jutsu List | Item Locker

Bukijutsu-SS|Ninjutsu-SS|Fuuinjutsu-D|Medical-D||Raiton-SS|Suiton-SS|Katon-S|Doton-D

Mission List: D:12 | C:4 | B:3 | A:6 | S:2 | SS:0

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