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1 Tengoku Clan on Fri Oct 24, 2014 3:09 am

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Clan: Tengoku

Kekkei Genkai: Artificial Yang Release

Elements: Katon; Raiton; Artificial Yang

Specialization: Bukijutsu (Kyujutsu); Ninjutsu

Location: Scattered

Clan History: Legend has it that there was once a man named Tendo Gokei who swore allegiance to no clan or nation. Nonetheless, he'd studied under ninja sages from all 5 nations, yet he could never find meaning. At age 24, he was visited by a spirit formed from light. This spirited prophesied, "Tomorrow you will be visited by person. This person will be wielding the weapon that Aether hath chosen for you. With this weapon, you and your offspring will learn the ways of the Aether. You will unlock the secrets to reaching perfect Trinity and to wield the Light of Aether. I will leave you with one necessary gift in order to unlock all of this. This gift will be given to all offspring of yours, but will be lost if a child is to perform the demonic arts. I will bestow upon you the Master's cloak."

Tendo woke up in the deserts next to a horse and a sleeping person in a dark hood. This person was obviously a tomb raider and a thief, given that the person was carrying a bag full of gold, coins, and precious jewels. Nonetheless, it was interesting that this person's only tools were a bow and a few arrows. A few minutes later, the thief woke up. Tendo quickly scrambled to grab the thief’s bow and arrows and aim it at the person.

“Sir, don’t move. What is your name and why did you bring me here!” , said Tendo in fear. The thief, after letting off a big yawn, stood upright despite his warning.

“Well that’s a nice way to treat a lady.” ,she said as she began to take off her hood. The thief had short sky-blue hair that matched her eyes. Her cheeks were pinched in as if they’d been slightly sewn together. She had a small, long nose and a small mouth.

“I go by the name Saki. Do me a favor and don’t try to shoot that bow at me. You’ll miss and I’ll laugh. I’m sure that the shinobi that you’ve trained under never taught you how to shoot a bow.” ,she said while fixing her hair. Tendo then slowly put the bow down.
“You’re the renowned Tendo Gokei correct?” ,Saki asked.

Shocked that Saki knew his name, Tendo said, “How do you know me?”

“All five villages are searching for you. They claim that you have stolen forbidden ninjutsu scrolls from all of the villages. They have a hefty reward out for finding you...dead or alive.”

“So I guess you’re about to turn me in for a crime I did not commit! From your collection of stolen goods, it is clear that you only care about money!”

“I’m not here to turn you in idiot. I would’ve killed you already if I was. And for your information, these goods were stolen from those who have gained riches by impoverishing, torturing, blackmailing, and even murdering others. I sell these goods and give the money to impoverished wandering ninja with no jobs.”

“Then why did you take me here?”

“To keep away those who will turn you in. Many desperate wandering and missing ninja have discovered your location, so I headed there on my horse so that I could get you before anyone else could.”

Tendo didn’t want to believe her, but he knew he had no choice.

“Fine then...I’ll go with you.”

Just then, a fire erupted in the distance.

“Hurry up and put this hood on!” ,Saki shouted as she handed Tendo a dark hood that looked similar to hers. Saki and Tendo quickly put on their hoods and Saki grabbed her bow and arrows. They then jumped onto the horse and fled. For six years, they traveled across the world. During those six years, Saki helped Tendo to master wielding the longbow.

After those six years, Tendo and Saki stopped in the forests to rest.

“You’re getting very proficient with your bow. You could win money with those skills.” ,Saki teased as she removed her hood

“Looks like you’re growing your hair out too long. It might stop fitting in your hood.” ,Tendo responded.

“This coming from you. You may not need to still wear a hood. Your beard covers your face well enough.” ,Saki snarled as she started to cut her hair with the edge of her arrow.

Tendo started to do the same and shave his beard with his arrow.

“How did you know that I was innocent before you came to save me?” ,Tendo asked curiously.

“I have a confession. I didn’t come to save you. I came to kill you and seek the reward, but when I saw you sleeping so peacefully, I knew that you weren’t guilty. A guilty man sleeps restlessly.” ,Saki stated.

“But why didn’t you just leave me there for someone else or just bring me in anyway. You would’ve still gotten the-”

Saki interrupted Tendo’s words with a long, passionate kiss.

“My conscious wouldn’t let me leave you. I couldn’t do that. I couldn’t abandon you. I still can’t even though you are more than capable of surviving on your own. What I’m trying to say is...I’ve fallen in love with you.” ,Saki said as she went in for another kiss. This time Tendo followed along.

“There is the culprit! Surround him and his accomplice!” shouted a voice nearby.

Saki quickly wielded her bow.

“I’ve crafted this bow for you for when you mastered kyujutsu. I feel like now is the time to give it to you.” ,Saki said as she handed Tendo a bow and a few arrows.

As the army closed in, Tendo and Saki began to shoot at the wave of ninja. As the army continued to shrink, one man stepped out from the shadows. He had black, long hair put into a single long braid and a fairly small nose. He extended his shadow using the trees and killed his entire army by making them snap their own necks.

"Pleased to meet your acquaintance. I am Yato Nara. I am the brains behind this entire plot. It was actually quite genius. Hire mercenaries to steal the forbidden scrolls for me and then use you as a scapegoat. You can't even stop me now. I'm the most powerful ninja alive. They would've never expected the thief to be Konoha's top general." ,the man said.

At this note, Tendo was enfuriated. Why would someone do such an evil thing. It is this point when Tendo unlocks the Aether Cloak.

He begins to battle Yato, telling Suki to stay back. Yato was slightly stronger and faster than Tendo, but his newly unlocked power made him nearly impossible to hit with any attack. Tendo let Yato wear himself out before finally landing a kick on Yato. He then began to rapidly attack him and quickly scooted backward. He then drew his bow to finish the job.

"By Aether law, I find you guilty of treason, massacre, and theft. Your sentence is...Annihalation! Heaven's Arrow! Trinity!" Tendo exclaimed. He then released all three of his arrows which were coated in bright light, or Artificial Yang chakra. Yato's body dissentigrated instantly upon contact.

Tendo and Suki had one son named Roku, who was the first born member of the Tengoku clan. He continued on the Tengoku clan with his 5 sons, one for each village and 1 daughter, who was a nomadic vigilante like her grandmother. The true center if the clan is still unknown to the outside world.

Kekkei Genkai Description: Artificial Yang Release: This kkg allows the manipulation of light itself. It is formed through extracting the light properties of fire and lightning and controlling it. Due to this method of forming chakra, only light formed by the user can be manipulated. Also due to this method, light formed by the user will appear green-yellow. Artificial Yang techniques also do not have the same vitalization properties as Natural Yang techniques. Artificial Yang is weak against Natural Yin and Yang, Katon, and Raiton and is strong against Fuuton, Suiton, and Doton.

*All Tengoku clan members are granted an Aether Trinity Bow (sealed), 20 arrows, and 5 Aether Trinity Bow summoning scrolls.
Aether Trinity Bow:
Name: Aether Trinity Bow
Type Of Weapon: Longbow; Reflex Bow
Rank: A
Elemental Alignment: Artificial Yang
Quantity: 1
Ability/Function: Can shoot arrows; Switches between Longbow and Reflex Bow form. (Longbow form for long range and Reflex Bow for firing in rapid succession.) The change in forms costs 5 chakra each time used.

The range in longbow form is 80m while the range in Reflex form is 25m. Both forms shoot at 35 m/s, buth in longbow form, it can only shoot 3 times per post while in Reflex bow form, it shoots 10 times per post.
Appearance:
History: Hand-crafted by the Tengoku clan elders
Aether Trinity Bow Summoning Scroll:
Name: Aether Trinity Bow Summoning Scroll
Type of Item: Scroll
Rank:A
Elemental Alignment: N/A
Quantity: 5
Ability/Function: Summons the Aether Trinity Bow
Appearance: Like a scroll
History: Made by the clan’s greatest Fuinjutsu experts
Arrows:
Item: Arrow
Rank: E
Quantity: 20
Price: 20 ryo per arrow, or a pack of 10 for 150 ryo.
Description: This generic arrow, when fired from a bow at full draw, can pierce half an inch into the target's flesh.
Appearance: This arrow spans 32 inches from tip to tail. The head is 3/4ths of an inch long, and made out of steel, with three razor heads forming a triangular shape. The shaft is Ash wood, with four white chicken feathers for fletching on the base end. The base has a small slit, called a nook, to allow it to attach to the string of the bow.

Drawbacks: -Due to the 2-1 transference rate, Artificial Yang release techiques cost double the amount of normal chakra to use.
-Members cannot use medical ninjutsu
-Members lose Artificial Yang Release if they are to specialize in genjutsu of kugutsu
-Members have a -1 to all physical techniques (as in punches, kicks, Taijutsu, and Bukijutsu  other than Kyujutsu) until Perfect Body(see Trinity) is reached.
-One cannot reach perfect spirit unless they are to take the SCs: Strong-willed an Foolhardy
-Cannot learn any elements other than those listed above
-Must take Hesitant(Specialization) which cannot be balanced
-Cannot join ANBU due to their lack of stealth capabilities since they glow when they use Artificial Yang Release and Aether Cloak.

Members: (Members of the clan can be updated here)

Kekkei Genkai Jutsu:
Aether Cloak:

Name:Aether Cloak
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C-S
Type: Supplementary
Element: Artificial Yang
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Maintainable
Cooldown: 1.5x Duration (fractions round up); Atleast 5 posts
Description: The user clears his/her mind in order to reach utmost awareness and spiritual enlightenment. The user glows a bright forest green when this is active.

C-Rank: The user  gains a +1 in Perception at the cost of -1 Strength. This is naturally acquired by all C-rank members of the clan, though a D-rank ninja may learn it for 2000 words.
B-Rank: The user gains a +1 in Perception with no Strength drawback. This is naturally acquired by all B-rank members of the clan, though a C-Rank ninja may learn it for 3000 words.
A-Rank:The user gains a +1 in Perception and Reaction Time at the cost of -1 Strength. This is naturally acquired by all A-rank members of the clan, though a B-rank ninja may learn it for 4000 words.
S-rank: The user gains a +1 in Perception and Reaction Time with no Strength Drawback. A-rank or above ninja may learn this for 6000 words.
Artificial Yang Formation:
Name: Artificial Yang Formation
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: E
Type: Supplementary
Element: Katon; Raiton
Range: 1m radius
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instantaneous
Cooldown: 2 posts
Description: The user extracts light energy from Raiton and Katon chakra and absorbs it into his or her own natural chakra in his body, causing the user's body to glow green-yellow. All Artificial Yang Release techniques use up this chakra rather than normal chakra. This Jutsu has no chakra cost, but the transference rate is 2 normal chakra for 1 Artificial Yang chakra. The more Yang chakra that is stored, the brighter the user glows.
Trinity:
Name: Heaven's Arrow: Trinity
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Element: Artificial Yang
Range: 80 meters
Specialty: Bukijutsu
Duration: Instantaneous
Cooldown: Whole thread
Description: The user shoots three arrows filled with the purest form or Artificial Yang chakra simultaneously. The arrows move at 70 m/s, meaning that it spans it's whole range in a little bit over a second. This Jutsu can potentially obliterate entire bodies, but in order to successfully perform this technique, one must meet three strict conditions: Perfect Body, Spirit, and Soul. In order to reach perfect body, one must have each stat at atleast S-Rank. In order to reach perfect spirit, one must take the special characteristics Strong-Willed and Foolhardy. In order to reach perfect soul, one's objective must be morally right, even if not lawfully right.



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2 Re: Tengoku Clan on Mon Oct 27, 2014 11:50 am

Katari Fantomusodo

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Bump for completion

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3 Re: Tengoku Clan on Wed Nov 05, 2014 7:57 pm

Tame

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Sorry for the wait on this. <3

This seems to be a limited form of Light Release, more focused on Light Arrows; however, it should be noted that you cannot have a Doujutsu and an Advanced Element in the same clan. (I can understand that both of these aspects on this clan are not to the power level that either alone would have in its own clan, but for the sake of being fair we only allow one of either.)

If you choose to keep the Release, you must detail what it is strong and weak against on the elemental wheel.

If you choose to keep the Doujutsu, I'm not quite sure. I would recommend you scrap this part, as it's more of a minor part of the clan's ability.

The jutsu are alright, except for Aether (mostly due to having both Doujutsu and Artificial Yang in there); in addition, halves of tiers aren't a thing. C-rank is the base for a +1 tier to any stat, also.


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4 Re: Tengoku Clan on Thu Nov 06, 2014 2:21 pm

Katari Fantomusodo

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Bumpity Bump Bump

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5 Re: Tengoku Clan on Thu Nov 06, 2014 7:22 pm

Tame

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Aether Cloak has a bit too much on it. D-rank, I would recommend you eliminate it; you can neither have flight (or at least anything beyond a hover) nor a +1 tier to anything at this rank.

For all other ranks, if you want flight you'll need another drawback. It doesn't balance if you just have your current ones (which are tailored to stat +1s only).

Heaven's Arrow, Trinity is largely okay; it has huge power in exchange for a relatively small and straight-shot attack, as well as some storyline/flavor restrictions. Some of those (namely Spirit and Soul) are kind of weird, but Body works well as another reason to have the jutsu be so immensely powerful


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6 Re: Tengoku Clan on Thu Nov 06, 2014 9:32 pm

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Bump, but should I change Spirit and Soul?

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7 Re: Tengoku Clan on Fri Nov 07, 2014 12:21 am

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No, it's quite fine. Perfect Body more than makes up for the other two (which are more flavor in my opinion, but the Soul one gives a nice mood for the clan).

I'll say outright that I now see flight + something else is a bit too much for any jutsu. u.u (sorry for not seeing it earlier).

A B-rank jutsu would suffice for flight, though you should also give how high you can fly, as well as how fast.


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8 Re: Tengoku Clan on Sun Nov 09, 2014 10:07 am

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Took out flight completely since it wasn't very important. Bump.

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9 Re: Tengoku Clan on Sun Nov 09, 2014 3:00 pm

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All Advanced Element clans must prohibit the learning of a fourth element.

Aether: This is not a Doujutsu (forgot to change it when you removed it, I think). Also, multiple times you state that Aether must be active to use Artificial Yang....so is Aether being active a prerequisite for the use of the Artificial Yang Formation technique?

I have no real problems after this.~


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10 Re: Tengoku Clan on Sun Nov 09, 2014 5:06 pm

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Aether is not a prerequisite, I just forgot to change it. Also, my clan does restrict the learning of a 4th element, as it limits the elements learned to Katon, Raiton, and Artificial Yang. I hope this is the final bump...

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11 Re: Tengoku Clan on Thu Nov 13, 2014 10:09 am

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Sorry for the wait >.<"

The tiniest thing here. The -1 to Tai and Buki, is this to the strength of basic strikes as well as jutsu? Clarify and I'll gladly 1/2 Approve.


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12 Re: Tengoku Clan on Tue Dec 02, 2014 1:28 pm

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Bump (Note my changes to Aether Trinity Bow)

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13 Re: Tengoku Clan on Fri Dec 12, 2014 12:11 pm

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Aether Trinity Bow: Detail max range and firing rate for each form.


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14 Re: Tengoku Clan on Fri Dec 12, 2014 2:34 pm

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15 Re: Tengoku Clan on Sat Dec 13, 2014 8:55 am

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1/2 Approved!


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16 Re: Tengoku Clan on Fri Jan 02, 2015 6:25 pm

Katari Fantomusodo

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bump for second half approval

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17 Re: Tengoku Clan on Mon Jan 12, 2015 2:14 pm

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Bumpity

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18 Re: Tengoku Clan on Thu Jan 15, 2015 4:39 pm

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Well, going to go ahead and have to say no to the free A-Rank items right off the bat.

Also, I'm unsure of what exactly you're trying to produce with this notion of artificial yang. Essentially all jutsu that aren't elemental by nature or explicitly Yin release, utilize Yang release. I'd like some clarification upfront as to how this differs.


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