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1 Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sat Dec 02, 2017 2:33 pm

Zeref Kyōakuna

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Clan Name: Kyōakuna (Iron-Hearted)
                     
Location: Kumogakure 
Specialization:  Ninjutsu
Elements: katon, Doton, Kōton



Clan History: 
Humble beginnings: It is unknown just how old Kyōakuna clan truly is, or if they are the original clan that harnessed Kōton, The earliest mention of the clan was during the fourth shinobi war against the Akatsuki. During the war the clan produced and supplied many of the weapons for the Allied Shinobi Force to combat the Akatsuki threat, besides that the clan was relatively passive in the war due to their limited numbers and skill in ninutsu.

Steel Forge: For the next hundred years the clan and the Kōton Kekkei Genkai was rarely spoken or heard of, that was until a Shnobi named Gajeel Kyōakuna rewrote the clans purpose from humble craftsmen into powerful shinobi. Gageel's skill with Kōton was unrivaled, able to wield huge amounts of Kōton as if it was nothing. With this skill and power he took over as head of the clan and started to train members to use Kōton as jutsu. Gajeel created dozens of Kōton based jutsu that were more offensively based rather than the simple weapon forging the clan was known for. After half a decade under Gajeels leadership the clan grew to be feared by enemy shinobi. Gajeel believed that mercy was a weakness, and he along with his top followers, trained the younger generations to think and believe the same. Under Gajeel the Kyōakuna was known for being brutal warriors, they never took survivors and if they did it was only to gain information after words killing off the captured enemy. Fighting, war, and becoming stronger became a vital part of the clans ideals, dying young became very common with in the clan, and was considered a good death to die in battle. The Gajeel and many members of the clan wanted to write theirs as well as the clans name into history even if it was with blood. Gajeels rule lasted roughly twenty years until Yuna, his granddaughter took over by beating, and killing Gajeel in a one on one battle to the death.

Steel forged in blood: Yuna was even more brutal and cold hearted than her grandfather. Gejeels main goal was expanding the clan, making it stronger, and well known; Yunas main focus was increasing the clans wealth, and further expanding their legend. Under Yuna rule the members of were trained at the age of seven, kids were taught how to fight and kill. The ideal and typical family was no longer a social construct, instead the clan as a whole raised the young, often children didn't know who their true parents were, Yuna believed this would help them become harden warriors. Yuna also changed the clans loyalty from that of Kumogakure, to who ever could pay. The clans name was indeed spreading under Yunas rule, but they were more known as mercenaries, and traitors than great warriors. Yunas rule didn't last nearly as long as her grandfathers after only three years there was a revolt with in the clan.

Revolt: The clan broke into two factions, on one side there were the members loyal to Yuna, on the other there were the members who were lead by a counsel who wanted to return to Kumogakure, fearing that it was only a matter of time before the village would come after them for being mercenaries. At first Yunas group was unmatched and was quickly smothering the revolt, that was until Kumogakure stepped in. At the request, and plea of the counsel Kumogakure sent in their own forces to aid in those loyal to the village defeat Yuna. The counsel and Kumogakure were noq gaining the upper hand in the revolt and had Yuna pinned with in the clans compound. Yuna, realizing she was going to lose unleashed a powerful jutus. The jutsu was powerful enough that it ended up leveling the entire compound of the clan admits the battle. Due to Yunas jutsu, not only did she die, but she took most of the clan on both sides with her. Kumogakure jailed the small handful members who were loyal to yuna, while the ones loryal to the village, numbing less than twenty scattered. Out of those who lived many abandoned the practice of Kōton. The clan that was quickly blazing their way through history, was just as quickly forgotten. 
Modern day(50 years to present): It has been three hundred years since the revolt took place, in modern day the Kōton kekkei genkai is very rare and there are not many known wielders of it. When the kekkei genkai does manifests, itself it is never more than being able to wield more than a few ounces of Kōton. There are those who know about the history of the Kyōakuna clan, and they believe that the kekkei genkai comes and goes like wild fire. It starts with a few embers, and soon it is a blazing fire that consumes all in it's wake, and then it is snuffed out. Historians believe that just like the appearance and rapid growth of Gajeel, it is only a matter of time before the kekkei genkai manifests in a big way. 
The number of people who are able to use Kōton is unknown, some thing it's less than a dozen. The only known direct descendant of Gajeel  as well as Yuna), is a young male known as Zeref Kyōakuna, making him the unofficial heir to the clans name. 
Members: 
Metoro Konjiki (Deceased)
Hiruko (Chimera Technique) (Deceased) 
Gajeel Kyōakuna (Deceased) 
Yuna Kyōakuna (Deceased)
Noc Kyōakuna (Deceased)
Zeref Kyōakuna (Alive, Unofficial heir)



Kekkei Genkai Name: Kōton (Steel Release)
Kekkei Genkai Description: Kōton is a rare Kekkei Genkai (Bloodline Limit) of the Kyōakuna clan. Combining Katon and Doton natures the clan is able to create and control Kōton. The creation of Kōton takes precise control over Doton (Earth) and Katon (Fire); Doton is used to draw out the correct ore (Iron, Coal) and then using Katon they are melded together to form Steel. Once the steel is created it is already infused with the clans chakra giving them ability to maintain, and control the steel. Once the steel is extracted and created it is in a molten state until the user molds it into shape and hardens it by lessening the Katon chakra with in it. Although the process seems to be  complicated, and require a large amount of focus, the Kyōakuna are able to do it absent mindlessly just as others can do with basic chakra natures. When the Kyōakuna members use their koton at A-rank, they are able to make Koton purely from their chakra and do not need to draw to from the earth.


Kyōakuna members can wield Kōton in either a molten state or a solid form. This allows the user to have complete control over what they wish to do. They could use a molten form of Kōton to flow more easily and trap targets. They user can also use Kōton in a molten state to form weapons, walls, tools, ect, before turning them solid. This is done through jutsu that must be apped. 

When the Kyōakuna members are not actively using the Kōton (I.E charka being channeled into it) The steel remains on the ground in the state that it was last in while it was active. While it is not active, Kōton becomes brittle, while in this brittle state it can be broken with a weapon or jutsu of equal power to Kōton.(The jutsu that created it)


Additionally Kyōakuna can only control steel that they created, this is due to the infusion of their own chakra during the creation process. They members can create weapons made of their own Kōton and then "melt" it down to a raw state. Once in a raw state clan members can bend it to suit their needs in battle, such as using it in a jutsu. (Example: Having a Katana at the start of the battle, melt it down and use the now raw Kōton to create a steel clone.) 
After the jutsu is completed the user can keep using the Kōton for other jutsus as long as the amount is correct. Weapons/ items made and apped from the user's steel can be used as a source for their jutsu, so long as the rank of the item/weapon is equal to or greater than the rank of the jutsu.
D rank weapon- 1 D ranked jutsu at a time.
C rank weapon- 1 C ranked jutsu or 2 D ranked at a time.
B ranked weapon- 1 B ranked jutsu, or 2 C ranked or 3 D ranked. Or a combination of 1 C and 2 D
Note: The weapon melting caps at B rank due to the clans ability to create A ranked Kōton jutsu from chakra alone.

Members of the Kyōakuna clan receive 20% Ryo reduction when creating, and free reforging of weapons that are made of Kōton. This means Kōton weapons act like consuming items, they will refill after each thread.
(In each app, it must be listed the item in question is made of Kōton.)

Kyōakuna steel is very effective against melee combat and as such when blocking with Kōton against tiajutsu and Bukijutsu, Kōton act as if +1 rank higher than normal.

Kōton is highly conductive and because of this it acts as if it is +1rank higher against Raition techniques. This is mainly because of the ability to act like a lightning rod, either grounding out the Raiton, or completely causing it to be drawn off it's desired path. It a Raiton jutsu is fired, a Kōton technique can pull it up to 5m off it's original course.  


Drawbacks:

  • Kōton is weak to Katon because of Katon can heat the Kōton back to it's raw state. Therefore all Katon techniques interact with Kōton at +1 rank.
  • Kōton is weak to Jiton because of the magnetic properties of Kōton. Therefore all Jiton techniques interact with Kōton at +1 rank.
  • Kōton level matches the lowest level between Katon, and Doton. (I.E Katon=S, Doton=C, Kōton=C). 
  • Kyōakuna spend most of their training on controlling Kōton, they have a hard time learning other elements. Members can not learn a fourth element because of this. Members can not take hesitant element as a negative.  
  • Due to members often being harsh, they are not known to be social, because of this all social threads have a 20% word increase.
  • Kōton based jutsu speed is -1 rank of the jutsu itself. (I.E S rank jutsu, will max out at A rank speed)




Special thanks: Many gave me advice, tips and small edits; Sero, Tomohiro, Kisei, Mitsuo, Raiu, Syekren. May have missed a few.



Last edited by Zeref Kyōakuna on Sun Dec 24, 2017 5:01 am; edited 17 times in total

2 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sun Dec 10, 2017 8:44 am

Hakara

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I have a few notes that I need you to take care of;

1)While I understand what your speed at -3 tiers thing means, you need to word it better so that it is clearly stated what's speed.
2)Your katon weakness is also worded oddly. Make it more along the lines of "Koton is weak to Katon because of (reason) and therefore all Katon techniques interact with Koton at +1 rank."
3)Hesitant spec is fine, but you have it in there twice. The third and 8th drawbacks are both hesitant spec. As a note on the 8th one, you don't need to take hesitant, you just have to note that you can't learn a 4th element due to this being an advanced element clan.
4)Speed drawback the same as my first point.
5) Your magnet release weakness needs to be tweeked. We don't allow players to "take over" one another. You can (and logically should) make it so that they get a +1 against Steel release, but the rank of their magnet and of your steel shouldn't matter.
6) Your social thread word increase is pretty high. You could easily knock it down to 20%, the ryo deduction for your own weapons is in the same boat. Reduce it to 20%.

I also would like you to give a bit more attention to your history as this is an advanced element clan, and therefore is held to a slightly higher standard.

Thats it for now, mostly it's wording issues. Fix what I've mentioned and rebump and we will take another look~

3 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sun Dec 10, 2017 9:02 am

Zeref Kyōakuna

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All changes made


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4 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Mon Dec 11, 2017 4:28 pm

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oookayyyy, lets see what we've got here...

[list][*]"The only known relative of Gajeel and Yuna, and unofficial hair to the clan, is a young male known as Zeref Kyōakuna" while i understand that this is likely to do with your character, it could be seen that you're trying to set this up that you're the only living member of this clan, please make a change to reflect this is not the case.

[*]your explanation of the element is good, I would like you to give some examples of things that steel can do, such as forge weapons, can you use molten metal? also, how does steel react when no more chakra is being flown through it / maintained? Does it hang around? become brittle? etc. (id prefer it to become brittle and able to be broken with str or a weapon of equal rank to the jutsu that made it.)

[*](Id give them free reforging >.>)

[*]okay, you're going to need to reword this section, as it comes off as a table that allows them to control an amount of metal within a range freely, almost like gaara sand control, rather than setting parameters for jutsu. This is going to be a little bit of a hard reword. Passive control should be made as maintainable jutsu by clan members, and the ranges and chakra costs of that would be jutsu dependant, so i would recommend you leave that. Also, volumes of metal would also be largely determined by the jutsu rules. However, if you would like to put a limit to how much metal can be 'actively' wielded at a time, i would go 1, 5, 10, 15, 30, 45. (Dont forget S and SS.) But the rest is covered by jutsu rules. If you want to increase charka costs etc, that would be a drawback, but i see no reason to as of yet.

[*]Drawbacks are good, note that they cannot take hesitant element either as a negative, because that would be dumb seeing as they can't learn a fourth and their third is determined by the other 2.


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5 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Tue Dec 12, 2017 9:26 am

Zeref Kyōakuna

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1- hope that wording is better.

2- Added more details and such. For the brittle part, i wasn't sure how to word it without making it seem like there needs to be a maintain few for jutsus after it is used. I.E "Steel wall jutsu." Create a steel wall to block that lasts 3 turns or till broken, does that mean for those 3 turns it will cost X chakra to keep it up? I'm jw cause i've seen jutsu (mostly defensive ones like making walls and such) that do last a couple of posts but don't need a maintain fee. or could i state that jutsu are permanently infused so they don't become brittle?
If those are old I will gladly add something like.
"While the steel isn't being used for a jutsu, or actively controlled, I.E charka being channeled into it, the steel remains on the ground in a semi liquid state as it cools naturally. After 2(?) posts the steel will be harden and will become brittle, while in a brittle state it can be broken with a weapon or jutsu of equal power to Kōton"

3- Gave them free reforging, didn't think i could get that.

4- got ride of the table if i understood correctly, it'll be easier to allow jutsu rules to determine amount, range, and all that.

5- Added the note.

I believe that is everything


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6 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Wed Dec 13, 2017 3:37 pm

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Heyo there Zeref! I’ll be stepping in for this instance of modding. You’ve done a pretty good job so far, mostly it’s just small details at this point.


~ General

- Please go through as try and check as many grammar mistakes as possible. While we can still follow it’ll help clear up the app, especially for those who want to join your clan.
 
~ KKG

-I’d I'll be fine with inactive koton to remain in the state they were left in when not actively maintained by chakra. Though to answer your 2nd question; yes indeed, it would cost an X amount of chakra to activate a jutsu with a set duration, meaning not maintainable, and it would last until its duration expired or it was broken by some means~

- Just to make it easier to differentiate between koton forged items or not, make it so that a mention that they were forged via koton is mandatory in such items.
o   On the same note since items forged by koton receive a free reforge could you edit it so that koton items function like consumable items. (They get restored by the end of a thread). To help further separate generic items from Koton forged items and cut down on the reforge threads that would be created in response. Our poor item mods are overloaded as it is.

- I like how your describing the formation of koton. Its alright as it is now, using the ambient earth as fuel for your koton jutsu, however at A-rank jutsu it'll be fine to create the koton element directly from your chakra.

 

~ Drawbacks


- Since steel amounts are being moderated by individual jutsu your fourth drawback wouldn’t really affect anything. On the same note, since you’ve removed the table your sixth drawback wouldn’t apply either.
- Please reduce the control speed of koton from -3 tiers of speed to 1 jutsu rank. (I.E S-rank koton jutsu would max out at A-rank speed.) So that you wouldn’t have passively scaling speed for all your jutsu and so we don’t have D-rank jutsu with B-rank speed xD


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7 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Wed Dec 13, 2017 9:28 pm

Zeref Kyōakuna

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General

[ went through again,
 
KKG

Added the brittle part

- Changes made to forging section.

- added "When the kyoakuna members use their koton at A-rank, they are able to make Koton purely from their chakra and do not need to draw to from the earth."

 

Drawbacks


Removed two drawbacks


- Speed changed, not sure if you meant for ALL jutsu, or just the jutsu that will move the "raw" koton from point A to B,

8 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Fri Dec 15, 2017 6:20 pm

Kisei

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Almost there! Just a few more things to go before your clan can be born, (in this case, ‘reborn’), into the world of Saga!
 
~ Drawbacks
-          The drawback mentioning the table range was the second drawback I suggested removing, sorry if I wasn’t clear on that. My fault there.
-          Concerning the speed drawback. When you say from point A to point B I think I understand what you’re saying but could you change it to a make it a default of -1 rank in speed for all Koton jutsu? Pretty please? You’ll still be able to increase their speed with jutsu drawbacks, but this way it’s more uniform. Especially concerning Active control jutsu based off the Sangotatsu’s water telekinesis or the Sabaku’s sand control which have no precise ‘points’.


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9 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Fri Dec 15, 2017 8:12 pm

Zeref Kyōakuna

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Changes made


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10 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sat Dec 16, 2017 10:52 am

Kisei

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I'mma go ahead and give this a thumbs up great work Zeref! Now we just need to contact an admin and get their approval.


1/2 Approval ~ Signed Kisei


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11 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sat Dec 16, 2017 11:04 am

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12 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Mon Dec 18, 2017 3:38 pm

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Pulled due to unforseen issue in item modding process, and is now considered UNAPPROVED

you just need to make it say "weapons/ items made and apped from the user's steel can be used as a source for their jutsu, so long as the amount of metal required is equal to or less than the amount for the jutsu" Then all you need to say on the weapon, is its made from your stee.

Or something akin to that. to make it easy


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13 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Tue Dec 19, 2017 12:44 am

Zeref Kyōakuna

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Added the following

"The amount of Koton a weapon can create will be enough for jutsu of the weapons rank(see below). After the jutsu is completed the user can keep using the Koton for other jutsu as long as the amount is correct. The number of jutsu that can be used at a time from the melted weapon is as followed:

D rank weapon- 1 D ranked jutsu at a time
C rank weapon- 1 C ranked jutsu or 2 D ranked at a time.
B ranked weapon- 1 B ranked jutsu, or 2 C ranked or 3 D ranked. Or a combination of 1 C and 2 D
Note: The weapon melting caps at B rank due to the clans ability to create A ranked Koton jutsu from chakra alone."

Is that worrded well enough?


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14 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sun Dec 24, 2017 4:31 am

Kisei

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With Ayakashi recovering I'll be stepping in for this instance of modding action.

Sorry I'm kinda late with this one! But shall we get to it? So far I've noticed these two things below.


   ~KKG


- You wouldn't need to create a jutsu to be able to app Koton items, it is already suggested that you have that ability through your kekkei genkai. All you'd need to do was say that it was forged by you with Koton to gain the buffs we've talked about.

- The extra cost for melting down an item to be used for a jutsu wouldn't necessarily be needed. Since you are using the koton item as a conduit for your jutsu as opposed to the ground the chakra cost would depend on the individual jutsu. Make sense?


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15 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sun Dec 24, 2017 4:46 am

Zeref Kyōakuna

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removed the melt down cost
removed the weapon thing


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16 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sun Dec 24, 2017 5:04 am

Kisei

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1/2 Approved


Now just get the approval of an admin and you'll be good to go! ^_^


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17 Re: Kyōakuna clan (Steel release) on Sun Dec 24, 2017 9:28 am

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