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1Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] Empty Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] on Fri Apr 12, 2019 10:14 am

Laïs Crowly

Laïs Crowly


C-rank
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A Rank - Ninja Ability:

Name: Mortality Transcended
Concept: Undeath
Description: Now a member of the sentient dead, Lais not only looks dead but is considered clinically dead by all medical examinations. Her body no longer requires food, drink or sleep. She no longer breathes or bleeds, and can't be affected by illness or pathogens requiring living tissue. The added benefit is that she no longer ages and can't die of old age~






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Mid value: duration, damage
D rank - Carrion's Infection:

Name: Crowly Hiden: Carrion's Infection
Origin: Custom
Rank: D-rank
Type: Offensive
Element: -
Range: Touch
Specialty: Iryojutsu
Duration: 2 posts
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Rat
Description:
Crowly Hiden. In line with their dark teachings, the Crowly gathers decaying energy within their weapons or limbs with the intention to have their blows inflict minor 1st degree tissue damage at the point of impact on top of the normal damage done by basic strikes/attacks.

The tissue damage takes on the form of gangrene, requiring a medical technique of equal rank to cure the infection.

Max value: duration
E rank - Returning Providence:

Name: Weapon Art: Returning Providence
Origin: Custom
Rank: E-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Fuuton | Wind Release
Range: Touch
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Bird
Description:
Channelling a brief amount of chakra into their thrown weapon of choice, the weapon master imbues their weapon with the ability to return to the owner's hand at the end of the post, either through a boomerang or rebounding effect. The thrown projectile's total travel distance, including its return, happens within the stated max range for thrown weapons as described in the Item Rules.

Every additional weapon infused after the first costs 5 additional chakra.

Max value: duration
Old version: 2nd post
E rank - Ricochet:

Name: Weapon Art: Ricochet
Origin: Custom
Rank: E-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Doton | Earth Release
Range: Touch
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Boar
Description:
Channelling a brief amount of chakra into their thrown weapon of choice, the weapon master imbues their weapon with the ability to ricochet off walls and targets alike without it damaging the weapon.

Every additional weapon infused after the first costs 5 additional chakra.

Max value: defence, duration (drawback)
Max drawback: catalyst
B rank - Surplice of the Serpent:

Name: Armour Art: Surplice of the Serpent
Origin: Custom
Rank: B-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Non-element
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Snake, Dragon
Description:
Inspired by Lamya's eight-headed serpent, this technique aims to mimic a similar durability. Infusing the shinobi's worn clothes or worn armour with chakra, scales of iridescent black reinforce the wearer with a protective measure that holds the ability to block two (2) B-rank techniques, four (4) C-rank techniques and an indefinite amount of D-rank or lower techniques.

The duration is boosted to 3 posts when activated with the catalyst [A+] of 'Hakana, Surplice of the Valkyrie'.







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max: speed, range (drawback)
max penalty: stat debuff
D rank - Celerity:

Name: Celerity
Origin: Custom
Rank: D-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: -
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Horse
Description:
Infusing the body with chakra to recreate a brief moment of extreme high speed, the practitioner displaces their body over a short distance. This enhancement briefly blurs their body as they move at +30 m/s speed over the short distance of 10m.

The practitioner can push beyond their limitations, increasing the displacement range to a maximum of 30m. However, the extreme trauma imposed upon the muscles results in a -1 tier speed penalty for 1 post afterwrads.


max: duration
D rank - Chakra Anaesthetic:

Name: Chakra Anaesthetic
(チャクラ麻酔 ~ Chakura Masui)
Origin: Canon
Rank: D-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: -
Range: Touch
Specialty: Iryojutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Boar - Dog
Description:
This jutsu acts as a numbing agent after having formed the appropriate hand seals. Placing their hand on their victim, the entire body's surface (up to a maximum of 3m 'radius' size) centred around the palms of the medic is suffused by a numbing sensation. This pain-killer only functions on the surface skin, making it great to apply surface surgery or subdue the pain caused by larger scale surface wounds. However, it does a poor job at numbing deep skin damage and internal pain.

max: damage
C rank - Chakra Enhanced Strength:

Name: Chakra Enhanced Strength
Origin: Canon
Rank: C-rank
Type: Offensive
Element: -
Range: Self
Specialty: Iryojutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Boar
Description:
A practical application of iryojutsu chakra control training, the shinobi channels a vast amount of chakra in their fist or foot to devastating effects.

When hitting a living being with this chakra enhanced strike, the impact causes displaced fractures at the point of impact and underlying bones before sending the target flying some 25 meter away. Should the target hit a wall (or something similarly solid) during that moment, a 10m radius crater will be created there where they crashed.

When hitting the environment directly, the user is capable of creating a fissure of 3m wide, 3m in depth and up to 25m in length, possibly tearing through an entire building this way or denying a frontal charge. The alternative is creating a 10m radius wide crater at the point of impact that drills up to 25m depth. Matter of making a point.

max: duration
C rank - Reflection Clone Jutsu:

Name: Reflection Clone Jutsu
(反射分身の術 ~ Hansha Bunshin no Jutsu)
Origin: Canon
Rank: C-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: -
Range: Self
Specialty: Iryojutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Snake
Description:
Using their own DNA as a blueprint and infusing it with their chakra though the Snake hand seal, the practitioner grows an identical twin of themselves. These clones are not capable of replicating any of the original's jutsu and possess no items other than clothes for basic decency. Despite being identical twins, these DNA clones preserve a sense of frailty and are therefore capable of being destroyed swiftly with a jutsu of C-rank or higher.

Being physically identical, it is impossible to distinguish between the original and the clone on a perceptive, chakra signature or genetic level unless a sensory of B-rank is being applied.


max: defence, duration (drawback)
drawback: stat penalty
C rank - Spectre's Resilience:

Name: Eldritch Arts: Spectre's Resilience
Origin: Custom
Rank: C-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: -
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Min
Description:
Allowing Yin-chakra to suffuse the body, the practitioner becomes partially translucent, as if they were turning into a ghost. The quantity of chakra present within their body denies foreign chakra from intruding upon its host, thus mitigating the effects of hostile jutsu by providing a supernatural defence. The shinobi is able to endure a single technique up to B-rank over the course of its duration.

The duration of this technique can be improved to three posts. However, doing so weakens the Yang coherence within the body, imposing a -2 tier penalty to endurance.

*Min is a canon hand seal from the Land of Demons.

max: defence, duration (drawback)
drawback: stat penalty
Former name: 'The Lost Eye sees All'
C rank - Allfather's Blessing:

Name: Eldtritch Arts: Allfather's Blessing
Origin: Custom
Rank: C-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: -
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Shin
Description:
Generally known for their pragmatic perception on life and their occult insights, a Crowly infuses their eyes with an invisible film of chakra which prevents the application of any visual foolery. The technique prevents sight trigger genjutsu and doujutsu effects from taking hold, blocking two (2) C-rank or four (4) D-rank techniques. If such techniques would already be active on the practitioner, they are broken and deducted from the protective charges.

The duration of this technique can be improved to three posts. However, doing so requires the eye a brief moment of readaptation, imposing a -2 tier penalty to perception.

*Shin is a canon hand seal from the Land of Demons.

max: healing
C rank - Yin-Spectrum Coagulation:

Name: Black Medicine: Yin-Spectrum Coagulation
Origin: Custom
Rank: C-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: -
Range: Self | Touch
Specialty: Iryojutsu
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: -
Hand Seals: Yin - Snake
Description:
Calling upon the Yin aspect within a body, the chakra brings 'that which does not exist' into existence, recreating absent flesh and bones to a point the damage never existed. This is different from the traditional Yang healing which stimulates restoration of already present DNA.

This technique restores damage inflicted from 1 C-rank or 2 D-rank techniques if the whole body would be covered, or elevates its efficiency by 1 rank if a particular limb only is being targeted (as per rules). Yin-Spectrum Coagulation can only target one person per activation.



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"Harken the flap of my wings and hear my cry...
The ash crow will herald the arrival of Yomi under the World's bleak sky,
but when the dead shall walk the World and the Serpent will swallow the sun,
neither you nor I will be crying when all is said and done."


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2Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] Empty Re: Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] on Fri Apr 12, 2019 10:15 am

Laïs Crowly

Laïs Crowly


C-rank
Code:

[b]Name:[/b] What is the name of your jutsu?
[b]Origin:[/b] Is the jutsu from the series or your own personal creation?
[b]Rank:[/b] What rank is your jutsu?
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive, Defensive or Supplementary?
[b]Element:[/b] If any, what Element is necessary to use the jutsu?
[b]Range:[/b] What is the range of your jutsu?
[b]Specialty:[/b] What Specialization is necessary to use the jutsu?
[b]Duration:[/b] State how long your jutsu, and any of its effects, last.
[b]Cooldown:[/b] For how many posts after the jutsu's Duration can you not use it again?
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Here you list the standard requirements to activate a jutsu, such as hand seals or genjutsu triggers, as well as preparation periods or similar requirements.
[b]Description:[/b] What exactly does the jutsu do? Explain in detail the effects and advantages of the technique. Detail only what the jutsu does, you do not need to put flavor text in here.





That rework...
- Current Jutsu List
- New Jutsu List
- Current Jutsu Registry


D Rank - Carrion's Infection:

Name: Crowly Hiden - Carrion's Infection
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Element: -
Range: Self
Specialty: Iryojutsu & Chakra Flow
Duration: Maintained, 5 chakra/post
Cooldown: Maintained +2 posts
Description:
Crowly Hiden. In line with their dark teachings, the Crowly gathers decaying energy within their weapons or limbs with the intention to have their blows inflict minor 1st degree tissue damage at the point of impact on top of the normal damage done by basic strikes/attacks. The accumulation of these destructive energies takes time, limiting the application of the decaying energies to once/post.

The tissue damage takes on the form of gangrene, requiring a medical technique of equal rank to cure the infection.
E Rank - Returning Providence:

Name: Weapon Art: Returning Providence
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: E
Type: Supplementary
Element:  Wind
Range: Touch
Specialty: Chakra Flow
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: 2 posts
Description:
Thrown weapons only. Channelling a brief amount of chakra into their thrown weapon of choice, the weapon master imbues their weapon with the ability to return to the owner's hand at the end of the post, either through a boomerang or rebounding effect. The thrown projectile's total travel distance, including its return, happens within the stated max range for thrown weapons as described in the Item Rules.

The weapon's ability remains for 1 post, and remains active for 2 more if the chakra is not renewed at the end of its stated duration. Every additional weapon infused after the first costs 5 additional chakra.
E Rank - Ricochet:

Name: Weapon Art: Ricochet
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: E
Type: Supplementary
Element:  Earth
Range: Touch
Specialty: Chakra Flow
Duration: 1 post
Cooldown: 2 posts
Description:
Thrown weapons only. Channelling a brief amount of chakra into their thrown weapon of choice, the weapon master imbues their weapon with the ability to ricochet off walls and targets alike.

The weapon's ability remains for 1 post, and remains active for 2 more if the chakra is not renewed at the end of its stated duration. Every additional weapon infused after the first costs 5 additional chakra.
B Rank - Surplice of the Serpent:

Name: Armour Technique: Surplice of the Serpent
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Defensive
Element: -
Range: Self
Specialty: Chakra Flow
Duration: Infinite
Cooldown: 5 posts after cancel/destruction.
Description:
Chakra Armour. Inspired by Lamya's eight-headed serpent, this technique aims to mimic a similar durability. Infusing the shinobi's worn clothes or worn armour with chakra, scales of iridescent black reinforce the wearer with a protective measure that holds the ability to block three C rank jutsu, two B rank jutsu or a single A rank jutsu. Like chakra clone nature, once the armour has been infused with chakra it persists until the technique has either been cancelled or destroyed, upon which the chakra scales flake off like a snake skin.

Prematurely cancelling the technique does not refund chakra.



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LaïsAlchemyDevicesGoetia

"Harken the flap of my wings and hear my cry...
The ash crow will herald the arrival of Yomi under the World's bleak sky,
but when the dead shall walk the World and the Serpent will swallow the sun,
neither you nor I will be crying when all is said and done."


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3Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] Empty Re: Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] on Tue Apr 30, 2019 12:16 am

Yoshihiro

Yoshihiro


B-rank
Laïs Crowly wrote:
For approval

C Rank - Ninja Ability:

Name: Shadow of an Ill Omen
Concept: Undeath
Description: By all appearances, Lais looks like she stands already with one foot into the grave. Deprived of sleep by nightmares and haunts, she is pallid in countenance and seemingly doesn't breathe. A faint smell of earth and natural decay surrounds her.
A Rank - Ninja Ability:

Name: Mortality Transcended
Concept: Undeath
Description: Now a member of the sentient dead, Lais not only looks dead but is considered clinically dead by all medical examinations. Her body no longer requires food, drink or sleep. She no longer breathes or bleeds, and can't be affected by illness or pathogens requiring living tissue. The added benefit is that she no longer ages and can't die of old age~

Ill Omen - I like this, 1/2 Approved!

Mortality Transcended - Thiiiiiis is a bit harder to decipher. While I think this is cool, the only thing that can be a bit tricky is what her undead state would mean for pvp rules and the Lethal Damage threshhold since losing an arm or loss of blood no longer incapacitates her. I'd like to see some sort of weakness here, even if its just as simple as 'destroying her brain is the only way to kill her' like in regular zombie movies. This is still cool though!


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4Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] Empty Re: Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] on Wed May 01, 2019 12:18 am

Hika

Hika


D-rank
Laïs Crowly wrote:
For approval

C Rank - Ninja Ability:

Name: Shadow of an Ill Omen
Concept: Undeath
Description: By all appearances, Lais looks like she stands already with one foot into the grave. Deprived of sleep by nightmares and haunts, she is pallid in countenance and seemingly doesn't breathe. A faint smell of earth and natural decay surrounds her.
A Rank - Ninja Ability:

Name: Mortality Transcended
Concept: Undeath
Description: Now a member of the sentient dead, Lais not only looks dead but is considered clinically dead by all medical examinations. Her body no longer requires food, drink or sleep. She no longer breathes or bleeds, and can't be affected by illness or pathogens requiring living tissue. The added benefit is that she no longer ages and can't die of old age~




Shadow of an Ill Omen is approved.

Mortality Transcended exceeds the bounds of what is allowed for Ninja Abilities. As shown here, the effect cannot be defensive; immunity to illness and pathogens requiring living tissue can be construed as a defensive ability if it interacts with jutsu (other Medical jutsu coming to mind). All other aspects of the ability do not affect combat and are good by me.


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5Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] Empty Re: Lais Crowly [Jutsu Revamp] on Mon May 06, 2019 4:43 pm

Laïs Crowly

Laïs Crowly


C-rank
Okay so...
- I supposed losing blood would no longer bring her to Death Threshold, but that's hardly worth a drawback as an A-rank? There are plenty of other ways to take someone down rather than through blood loss. Losing an arm, however, remains a handicap. While she might not bleed to death, the arm doesn't just regrow. Performing jutsu, fighting, etc... would still be nigh-impossible. Likewise, destroying the brain is a default sure-kill for just about anything. Is it really needed to state that?
- So for illness/pathogens, I'm mostly hinting at natural ones since indeed, this can not be affected by jutsu. It falls in line with Maik's ability that lowers physical damage by 1 rank (which can be caused by jutsu as well for that matter). I assumed the 'no jutsu' would have been a default clause no matter what you wrote down.


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LaïsAlchemyDevicesGoetia

"Harken the flap of my wings and hear my cry...
The ash crow will herald the arrival of Yomi under the World's bleak sky,
but when the dead shall walk the World and the Serpent will swallow the sun,
neither you nor I will be crying when all is said and done."


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