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1Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Wed Jun 12, 2019 10:55 am

Jurou

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S-rank
B-RANK

Great Dragon Bullet:
Name: Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet (Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: Futton (Liquid Acid / Corrosive Mist)
Range: 20-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 post
Hand Seals: Boar - Rat
Description:
Great Dragon Bullet is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra. Then, they exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a 10 ft tall dragon which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. When the dragon crashes upon the target, it will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target and the dragon when it crashes, causing a fog of mist-like chakra to corrode the area. The mist will surround the area within 10 meters, inflicting sunburn damage for 3 posts.
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[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet ([i]Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Liquid Acid / Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 20-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts.
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Boar - Rat
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Great Dragon Bullet[/b] is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra. Then, they exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a 10 ft tall dragon which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. When the dragon crashes upon the target, it will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target and the dragon when it crashes, causing a fog of mist-like chakra to corrode the area. The mist will surround the area within 10 meters, inflicting sunburn damage for 3 posts.

Corrosive Blind:

Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Blind (Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-rank
Type: Offensive / Supplementary
Element: Futton (Liquid Acid)
Range: 5 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Hand Seals: Horse
Description:
Corrosive Blind is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing acid onto the victim's face, possibly inflicting moderate 2nd-degree tissue damage for 1 post and moderate 1st-degree tissue damage for the remaining 2 posts, blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a speed of 50m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.
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[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Corrosive Blind ([i]Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive / Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] 5 meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Horse
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Corrosive Blind[/b] is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing acid onto the victim's face, possibly inflicting minor 2nd-degree tissue damage for 1 post and moderate 1st-degree tissue damage for the remaining 2 posts, blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a speed of 50m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.



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2Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Wed Jun 12, 2019 11:14 am

Jurou

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S-rank
CLAN JUTSU

Skilled Mist Technique:
Name: 沸遁・巧霧の術 (Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu ~ Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique)
Canon/Custom: Canon.
Rank: A.
Type: Offensive.
Element: Futton.
Range: Long range (<50m)
Specialty: Ninjutsu.
Duration: 6 posts. -10 chakra per post after.
Cooldown: 9 posts.
Description: The user creates a cloud of mist which she releases from their mouth. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that if a B-rank or higher Wind Release jutsu is used on it, the mist can be cleared completely. C-rank Fuuton can reverse the post count by 1, replacing some of the acids with regular air.

This technique follows a damage scale per post. If armor is of higher rank than a post's exposure can melt, the area that the armor protects isn't affected.

  • Direct exposure (1 post): The skin begins to feel very irritated. The targets' clothes begin to crumble away into nothing, up to 2 layers. Targets begin to cough from the ingestion of the mist. C-rank armors are rendered useless.
       
  • 2 posts: 3 more layers of the target's clothing are dissolved. The skin itself starts to melt. B-rank armors are neutralized, and targets have severe breathing difficulty.
       
  • 3 posts: The majority of the target's skin has melted, partially or completely exposing the muscle. The eyes, if not covered, will have suffered extreme damage as well. The muscle begins to be affected by the acid, and the lungs also start to melt from the inside out. A-rank armors and even defensive jutsu are useless at this point. If not rushed out of the mist at this point, the damage could be irreparable.
       
  • 4 posts: The lungs having melted, the target's insides begin to melt, causing widespread pain and damage. Only those of A-rank or above that are Strong-Willed or those of S-rank could even hope to be moving at this rank. S-rank jutsu and armor can be melted through by this time. The target begins to die of oxygen starvation, if anything, at this point.
       
  • 5 posts: Flesh begins to melt off of the bone. Most targets without an S-rank or higher regenerative jutsu active will die at this stage. SS-rank armor or jutsu will fail to protect targets from anything now.

Code:
[b]Name:[/b] 沸遁・巧霧の術 (Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu ~ Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique)
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Canon.
[b]Rank:[/b] A.
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive.
[b]Element:[/b] Futton.
[b]Range:[/b] Long range (<50m)
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu.
[b]Duration:[/b] 6 posts. -10 chakra per post after.
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 9 posts.
[b]Description:[/b] The user creates a cloud of mist which she releases from their mouth. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that if a B-rank or higher Wind Release jutsu is used on it, the mist can be cleared completely. C-rank Fuuton can reverse the post count by 1, replacing some of the acids with regular air.

This technique follows a damage scale per post. If armor is of higher rank than a post's exposure can melt, the area that the armor protects isn't affected.
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[*]Direct exposure (1 post): The skin begins to feel very irritated. The targets' clothes begin to crumble away into nothing, up to 2 layers. Targets begin to cough from the ingestion of the mist. C-rank armors are rendered useless.
    
[*]2 posts: 3 more layers of the target's clothing are dissolved. The skin itself starts to melt. B-rank armors are neutralized, and targets have severe breathing difficulty.
    
[*]3 posts: The majority of the target's skin has melted, partially or completely exposing the muscle. The eyes, if not covered, will have suffered extreme damage as well. The muscle begins to be affected by the acid, and the lungs also start to melt from the inside out. A-rank armors and even defensive jutsu are useless at this point. If not rushed out of the mist at this point, the damage could be irreparable.
    
[*]4 posts: The lungs having melted, the target's insides begin to melt, causing widespread pain and damage. Only those of A-rank or above that are Strong-Willed or those of S-rank could even hope to be moving at this rank. S-rank jutsu and armor can be melted through by this time. The target begins to die of oxygen starvation, if anything, at this point.
    
[*]5 posts: Flesh begins to melt off of the bone. Most targets without an S-rank or higher regenerative jutsu active will die at this stage. SS-rank armor or jutsu will fail to protect targets from anything now.
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Revamped Skilled Mist Technique:
Name: Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique (沸遁・巧霧の術 ~ Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: S
Type: Offensive.
Element: Futton (Corrosive Mist)
Range: 100-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu.
Duration: 3 posts
Hand Seals: Horse
Description: The user creates a cloud of mist which is released from their mouth, traveling at 100m/s within a 100-meter radius. This mist has extremely corrosive properties. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that it is resisted easily by physical techniques, (such as an earth wall), interacting as if one rank lower. Corrosive mist-type attacks such as this can be dispersed easily as if any other cloud of fog; as such, Fūton acts as if it were one rank higher when interacting with it and can forcibly interact with and prematurely end Futton techniques, where other types of techniques cannot.

Since the pH levels of this technique are considered hazardous at pH=0 - being battery acid or hydrochloric acid, this technique inflicts damage of 2 ranks lower for living beings/items at Moderate 2nd-Degree tissue damage and other jutsu of 1 rank or lower at Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique (沸遁・巧霧の術 ~ [i]Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Canon
[b]Rank:[/b] S
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive.
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 100-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu.
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Horse
[b]Description:[/b] The user creates a cloud of mist which is released from their mouth, traveling at 100m/s within a 100-meter radius. This mist has extremely corrosive properties. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that it is resisted easily by physical techniques, (such as an earth wall), interacting as if one rank lower. Corrosive mist-type attacks such as this can be dispersed easily as if any other cloud of fog; as such, Fūton acts as if it were one rank higher when interacting with it and can forcibly interact with and prematurely end Futton techniques, where other types of techniques cannot.

Since the pH levels of this technique are considered hazardous at pH=0 - being battery acid or hydrochloric acid, this technique inflicts damage of 2 ranks lower for living beings/items at Moderate 2nd-Degree tissue damage and other jutsu of 1 rank or lower at Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage.



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3Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Thu Jun 20, 2019 4:50 pm

Jurou wrote:A-Rank
Boil Angel Figure:
Name: 沸騰忍術を:猪残忍大天使奴隷 {Futton Ninjutsu: Fierbe Papusi Inger ~ Boil Release: Boil Angel Figure}
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive | Supplementary
Element: Boil Release
Range: Any Range.
Specialty: Kekkai Genkai, Ninjutsu
Hand Seals: Boar (亥, I)
Duration: 1 post for the creation of the figure. 3 posts then the figure disperses into a mist.
Cooldown: 6 posts after the figure disperses into a mist.
Description: Jurou forms the Boar hand seal with one hand or two to create and shape a large amount of mist chakra into his exact likeness, an exact replica of himself. Everything that Jurou does or says, the replica can do the same. Same techniques, weapons... everything. Because this replica can do every technique Jurou can do, it's chakra is halved from Jurou's original chakra (Since Jurou's original chakra is 250, the replica's chakra is 125). The replica is very life-like, as it can appear to bleed from wounds or get burned from fire, or get shocked and numbed by lightning. Jurou can only trick an opponent with it once, so he saves this technique usually towards the end of the battle to go into his favor. Fighting this figure would be similar to fighting the real thing. When attacked by an A-rank or higher Wind Release or Ice Release technique, the figure disperses into a mist in a much shorter time of 2 posts. If Jurou uses Skilled Mist Technique to create and shape a large amount of mist chakra, and when the figure is dispersed into mist, the effects of the mist is the same as Skilled Mist when it is used the 1st and 2nd time (meaning both effects of Skilled Mist Technique (1st and 2nd turn) are combined into the figure when it is destroyed, only when Skilled Mist is first used to shape the chakra into the exact replica).

Boiling Mist Dragon:
Name: Boil Release: Boiling Mist Dragon Technique
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Element: Boil Release
Range: Long Range (30 m)
Specialty: Kekkai Genkai, Ninjutsu
Duration: Three posts.
Cooldown: Eight posts.
Description: This technique is derived from its parent jutsu, Skilled Mist Technique. The technique begins with the Osada user using 2 Clone Techniques of Fire, or Mist element, using Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique to create the mist, or heating up the water particles using Fire Release chakra (in Jurou's case, Water Release: Archerfish + Fire Release: Small Fire Technique to aim at the Archerfish = Mist chakra). If the Osada user uses a clone technique of a Fire, or Mist element (preferably Mist to make it much easier), the Fire Clone will disperse into flames into which the Osada user can utilize a Water Release technique in conjunction to create the mist, or the Mist Clone will disperse into a cloud of mist. If any of the suggestions work, the Osada user can shape the Mist Chakra, creating a flow of mist shaped like a Chinese dragon that can extend its neck's length, or simply form the Dragon (辰, Tatsu) hand seal and thrust upon the mist to create the Chinese dragon's head and neck. The mist does not affect the Osada user when he/she thrusts the dragon hand seal into the mist (The mist can melt the skin of the user if not immune to the jutsu, preferably Skilled Mist Technique). The dragon's neck can extend past Long Range (15+m) as the dragon attacks the intended target. The dragon can only do two commands:

  • Grabs the opponent with its mouth and extends its neck, soaring in the air. The bite does leave an actually bite wound with muscle-deep wounds and piercing. Following by circle formation to descend to the ground and crash into the ground with the opponent crashing also. The dragon will then disperse into a mist that has the same effects as Skilled Mist Technique (3rd and Last Turn). If using Skilled Mist Technique to create the dragon, the dragon's bite as it holds the opponent can burn and melt them as well, causing Third Degree Burns (Extends through the skin and affects deeper tissues into underlying muscle and bone, resulting in black charred skin that may be numb). If not using Skilled Mist to create the dragon, the dragon's bite does not burn the opponent.
     
  • It opens its mouth and fires a mist that has the same effects as Skilled Mist Technique (2nd Turn).


Steam Consolation:
Name: Boil Release: Steam Consolation
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Futton
Range: 20 to 25 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 4 posts
Cooldown: 9 posts
Description: Steam Consolation is activated only if the user has Hiding in Mist. The user can decrease the water vapor acid to take on a more solid, thick appearance while still having the ability to melt with the increased acidity. Users of the Osada are immune to this technique. The lethality of the techniques comes into place to where Doujutsu cannot pierce the chakra of the mist (except Byakugan of course), and hiding inside the mist for an assassinated strike to close the battle. The extent of the area that this jutsu can cover is 25 meters maximum.

Burning Edge:
Name: エッジを燃やす {Burning Edge}
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Boil Release
Range: -
Specialty: Ninjutsu - Bukijutsu
Duration: - 25 chakra | 10 chakra per turn
Cooldown: 5 posts.
Description:
This jutsu enables the strikes that connect to the opponent by any weapon to suffer major 2nd/minor 3rd degree of burns.
If the strike hits clothing, 3 to 4 layers of clothing is burned upon contact.


S-Rank
Corrosive Grasp:
Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Grasp
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Futton
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 5 posts.
Cooldown: 12 posts.
Description: Concentrating the user's chakra and condensing it into vapor-like chakra, the user can gather fire release chakra to raise the temperature of the acid, making it seem as if the user itself is melting. The user's physical body then turns into a gel-like substance in which it is released from the user's body, which is capable of burning those that touch the user. The extent damage of those who touch the user is extended to a body part if upper body or lower body comes in contact. If full body contact, well... you know. In addition, if the user touches any physical substance, the substance itself is burned, or melted if severe contact for a long period of  time. The mist chakra is also spread from the touched area, eluding the air with high temperature acid. Although the user is a humanoid gel, he is unable to use the jutsu for a longer period of time, or the the user will suffer fourth degree burn effects.

Just looking at these jutsu, I would recommend you reread the jutsu guidelines, which I will link, and the Osada Clan guideline, which I will also link. It might be best to relearn the rules in both and take a look at them when making jutsu.

Jutsu Guidelines: http://www.narutosaga.com/t29547-jutsu-guideline

Osada Clan: http://www.narutosaga.com/t30239-osada-clan



Mist Masterful Body: Maintainability no longer exist. Additionally, cooldowns are no longer required. D-Rank jutsu require 10 chakra.

Piercing Blade: Cooldowns are no longer required for any jutsu. Additionally, numbing/limb-paralysis, which is what I think you’re trying to go with here, begins at C-Rank. Additionally, you’ll have to describe what “scratches” means in this case in regards to the damage guideline chart.

Corrosive Arrows: For C-Rank, the min effect for range is 25 meters, so I would recommend you make this technique that range.Additionally, you’ll need to give a number for the radius of the mist you create with this technique. Additionally, Boil Release’s Corrosive Mist does -2 ranks of damage to individuals and interacts over a course of several posts. I would recommend you read the new Osada Clan rules for a thorough explanation.

Boil Clones: Currently clones are being revamped and are unable to be approved. Sorry about this.

Mist Death Barrage: What’s the radius of the created mist? Additionally, I would like you to give hard numbers for range instead of things like (5-10) and (10-15). Additionally, when making jutsu you should be aware of the “max effect” system. Jutsu D-B only get one by default, while A and S-Ranks get two. This number can be increased by one by giving a jutsu adrawback. A three post duration would be a max effect on this jutsu, and so would having multiple projectiles. I would also ask you to define the range of the swing that the senbon are scattered in with hard numbers, as well as another reminder to look at the Osada Clan’s new rules for how the “Corrosive Mist” functions.

15 Hit Kill: For this, what about the sword slashing makes it a jutsu? It sounds like the only thing chakra enhanced is the fire-release enhanced kick. Additionally, you’ll need to give numbers for everything, including how far into the air they’re kicked. This, honestly, doesn’t really sound like a jutsu but instead a combo of basic strikes. The last sentence especially, since you can’t cast a jutsu within a different jutsu.

Void Walk: The values for B-Rank ranges are 40|60|80, being Min|Mid|Max respectively. I would ask you stick to these values. Additionally I would ask you stick to the speed values for the rank. At B-Rank, a flat speed increase is capable of boosting you by 50 meters per second. Cooldowns are no longer needed, and you’ll have to give this a duration as well of at least one post. When putting tissue damage, I would ask you look at the damage chart and select one of the listed values instead of just putting “second degree”. B-Rank min is Moderate Second Degree, for example.

Great Dragon Bullet: The values for B-Rank ranges are 40|60|80, being Min|Mid|Max respectively. I would ask you stick to these values. Additionally, no cooldowns are required any longer. Instead of putting “50 to 60 m/s”, I would also ask you stick to having one hard number.

Corrosive Blind:
This says it has a duration of one post but could blind people for two posts. Change the duration to 2 posts to fix this. Additionally, please give a single hard number instead of “Corrosive Blind”

Boil Angel Figure: No cooldowns are needed. Also, I’m sorry, but clones and clone-like techniques currently are being redone and cannot be approved.

Boiling Mist Dragon Technique: This technique has clones a part of it, and currently we aren’t approving clone techniques. Sorry.

Steam Consolation: You’ll have to define better how much damage this technique does. I would recommend you to look at the Osada Clan rules for damage guidelines that their corrosive mist follow.

Burning Edge: Maintainables like this are no longer a thing. You’ll need to give it a duration. Additionally, Bukijutsu is no longer a spec.

Corrosive Grasp: The max duration is 3 posts for a jutsu. Cooldowns are no longer required as well.


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4Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Mon Jun 24, 2019 2:31 pm

Jurou

Jurou


S-rank
Half of the jutsu that's  on here I'll end deleting and replacing with new jutsu

CHANGES MADE
Mist Masterful Body
Great Dragon Bullet
Corrosive Blind
Steam Consolation
Burning Edge
Corrosive Grasp

JUTSU DELETED
Piercing Blade
Corrosive Arrows
Boil Clones
Mist Death Barrage
15-Hit Kill
Void Walk
Boil Angel Figure
Boiling Mist Dragon Technique


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5Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Wed Jun 26, 2019 12:20 pm

Jurou wrote:A-Rank

Steam Consolation:
Name: Boil Release: Steam Consolation (Futton: Suchīmukonsorēshon ~ スチームコンソレーション)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A-rank
Type: Offensive | Supplementary
Element: Futton (Corrosive Mist)
Range: 25- meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: /
Description:
Steam Consolation is activated in conjunction with the jutsu Hiding In Mist Technique. The user can decrease the water vapor acid to take on a more solid, thick appearance while still having the ability to melt through solid objects slowly with the increased acidity. The lethality of the techniques comes into place to where Doujutsu cannot see through the chakra of the mist (except Byakugan of course), and the damage output of this derived jutsu would be distributed in 3 posts
First Post
Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage to any living being 2 ranks or lower w/ burning through 3 layers of clothing / S-rank armor would have 2 posts of Minor 2nd-degree tissue damage
Second Post
Moderate 2nd-degree tissue damage towards any living being 2 ranks or lower
Third Post
Major 1st-degree tissue damage
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Steam Consolation ([i]Futton: Suchīmukonsorēshon ~ スチームコンソレーション[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] A-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive | Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 25- meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Cooldown:[/b] /
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Steam Consolation[/b] is activated in conjunction with the jutsu Hiding In Mist Technique. The user can decrease the water vapor acid to take on a more solid, thick appearance while still having the ability to melt through solid objects slowly with the increased acidity. The lethality of the techniques comes into place to where Doujutsu cannot see through the chakra of the mist (except Byakugan of course), and the damage output of this derived jutsu would be distributed in 3 posts
[quote][b]First Post[/b]
Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage to any living being 2 ranks or lower w/ burning through 3 layers of clothing / S-rank armor would have 2 posts of Minor 2nd-degree tissue damage
[b]Second Post[/b]
Moderate 2nd-degree tissue damage towards any living being 2 ranks or lower
[b]Third Post[/b]
Major 1st-degree tissue damage [/quote]

Burning Edge:
Name: エッジを燃やす {Burning Edge}
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Boil Release
Range: -
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 posts
Cooldown: /
Description:
Coating any weapon the user has with Boil Release chakra, Burning Edge enables the strikes of the weapon that connect to the opponent by any weapon to suffer major 2nd/minor 3rd degree of burns.
If the strike hits clothing, 3 to 4 layers of clothing is burned upon contact.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] エッジを燃やす {Burning Edge}
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] A-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Boil Release
[b]Range:[/b] -
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Cooldown:[/b] /
[b]Description:[/b]<br>Coating any weapon the user has with Boil Release chakra, [b]Burning Edge[/b] enables the strikes of the weapon that connect to the opponent by any weapon to suffer major 2nd/minor 3rd degree of burns.<br> If the strike hits clothing, 3 to 4 layers of clothing is burned upon contact.


S-Rank
Corrosive Grasp:
Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Grasp
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Futton
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts.
Cooldown: Duration.
Description:
Corrosive Grasp is a terrifying technique that can be used as a last resort in Close Combat. Concentrating the user's chakra and condensing it into liquid acid-like chakra, the user can gather the chakra inside of the user to raise the temperature of the acid, making it seem as if the user itself is melting. The user's physical body then turns into a gel-like substance in which it is released from the user's body, which is capable of burning those that touch the user. The extent damage of those who touch the user is extended to a body part if the upper body or lower body comes in contact. If full-body contact, well... you know. In addition, if the user touches any physical substance, the substance itself is burned, or melted if severe contact for a long period of time. The mist chakra is also spread from the touched area, eluding the air with high-temperature acid. Although the user is a humanoid gel, he is unable to use any jutsu until the deactivation of this technique.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Corrosive Grasp
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] S rank
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts.
[b]Cooldown:[/b] Duration.
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Corrosive Grasp[/b] is a terrifying technique that can be used as a last resort in Close Combat. Concentrating the user's chakra and condensing it into liquid acid-like chakra, the user can gather the chakra inside of the user to raise the temperature of the acid, making it seem as if the user itself is melting. The user's physical body then turns into a gel-like substance in which it is released from the user's body, which is capable of burning those that touch the user. The extent damage of those who touch the user is extended to a body part if the upper body or lower body comes in contact. If full-body contact, well... you know. In addition, if the user touches any physical substance, the substance itself is burned, or melted if severe contact for a long period of time. The mist chakra is also spread from the touched area, eluding the air with high-temperature acid. Although the user is a humanoid gel, he is unable to use any jutsu until the deactivation of this technique.

Mist Masterful Body: This describes the user as being able to make the liquid acid from thin air, but in what range? I assume this is supposed to be used to assist other jutsu, so would it use their range for this?

Great Dragon Bullet: You say this does third degree burns, but what sort? I’ll link the damage table. In it, minor, moderate, and major third degree burns are defined differently. In addition to this, you’ll have to define how far “the surrounding area” is for the impact.

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Corrosive Blind: In the description you write “5 through 15 meters in length”, but in the range section you put 40 meters. I assume 40 meters is the correct range, and so you should alter the description to represent this. Additionally, this should be a supplementary jutsu rather than offensive. I also want to let you know that all Boil Release techniques have a free three post duration, and so you can make your duration 3 posts instead of 2 if you want. Additionally, you don’t need a cooldown.


Steam Consolation: Approved

Burning Edge: This is approved, but I want to let you know that all Boil Release jutsu can have a free three post duration, and so you can make your duration 3 posts instead of 2 if you want.

Corrosive Grasp: You’ll need to define what sort of damage this technique causes. Additionally, you’ll have to define how far the mist chakra is spread from the touched areas. Additionally, not drawback is needed.


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6Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Wed Jun 26, 2019 1:04 pm

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S-rank
CHANGES MADE
Mist Masterful Body
Great Dragon Bullet
Corrosive Blind
Burning Edge (changed the Duration to 3 as you said)
Corrosive Grasp


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7Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Thu Jun 27, 2019 11:24 pm

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S-rank
Jurou wrote:D-rank
Mist Masterful Body:
Name: 沸騰:霧状見事体 {Futton: Ceata Maiestrie Corp ~ Boil Release: Mist Masterful Body}
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Element: Boil Release
Range: Self
Specialty: Kekkai Genkai
Duration: Instantaneous
Cooldown: /
Description: This technique is used by all Osada clan users and is automatically activated with -10 chakra cost and the Boar Hand Seal performed. It is simply described as making the Osada user creating liquid acid-like chakra from thin air within a 5 meter radius from the user, where most is produced from their mouth. The user can create vast quantities of the substance without a present water source, enabling the clan to create high-level Boil Release techniques with the Liquid Acid variation at any given time.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] 沸騰:霧状見事体 {Futton: Ceata Maiestrie Corp ~ Boil Release: Mist Masterful Body}
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Boil Release
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Specialty:[/b] Kekkai Genkai
[b]Duration:[/b] Instantaneous
[b]Cooldown:[/b] /
[b]Description:[/b] This technique is used by all Osada clan users and is automatically activated with -10 chakra cost and the Boar Hand Seal performed. It is simply described as making the Osada user creating liquid acid-like chakra from thin air within a 5 meter radius from the user, where most is produced from their mouth. The user can create vast quantities of the substance without a present water source, enabling the clan to create high-level Boil Release techniques with the Liquid Acid variation at any given time.

C-RANK

B-RANK

Great Dragon Bullet:
Name: Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet (Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: Futton
Range: 60-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 post
Cooldown: /
Description:
Great Dragon Bullet is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra, which they hold for a few seconds. They then exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a Chinese Dragon Head which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. On impact, the mist will explode towards the object it hit, devouring it in the mist. The mist will cause moderate second-degree burns on the surrounding area within 15 meters and will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet ([i]Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] 60-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 2 post
[b]Cooldown:[/b] /
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Great Dragon Bullet[/b] is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra, which they hold for a few seconds. They then exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a Chinese Dragon Head which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. On impact, the mist will explode towards the object it hit, devouring it in the mist. The mist will cause moderate second-degree burns on the surrounding area within 15 meters and will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target

Corrosive Blind:

Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Blind (Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Futton
Range: 5 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Description:
Corrosive Blind is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing mist onto the victim's face, possibly blinding or damaging the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a max speed of 85m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close to approximately 5 meters since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Corrosive Blind ([i]Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] 5 meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Corrosive Blind[/b] is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing mist onto the victim's face, possibly blinding or damaging the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a max speed of 85m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close to approximately 5 meters since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.
A-Rank

Steam Consolation:
Name: Boil Release: Steam Consolation (Futton: Suchīmukonsorēshon ~ スチームコンソレーション)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A-rank
Type: Offensive | Supplementary
Element: Futton (Corrosive Mist)
Range: 25- meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: /
Description:
Steam Consolation is activated in conjunction with the jutsu Hiding In Mist Technique. The user can decrease the water vapor acid to take on a more solid, thick appearance while still having the ability to melt through solid objects slowly with the increased acidity. The lethality of the techniques comes into place to where Doujutsu cannot see through the chakra of the mist (except Byakugan of course), and the damage output of this derived jutsu would be distributed in 3 posts
First Post
Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage to any living being 2 ranks or lower w/ burning through 3 layers of clothing / S-rank armor would have 2 posts of Minor 2nd-degree tissue damage
Second Post
Moderate 2nd-degree tissue damage towards any living being 2 ranks or lower
Third Post
Major 1st-degree tissue damage
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Steam Consolation ([i]Futton: Suchīmukonsorēshon ~ スチームコンソレーション[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] A-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive | Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 25- meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Cooldown:[/b] /
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Steam Consolation[/b] is activated in conjunction with the jutsu Hiding In Mist Technique. The user can decrease the water vapor acid to take on a more solid, thick appearance while still having the ability to melt through solid objects slowly with the increased acidity. The lethality of the techniques comes into place to where Doujutsu cannot see through the chakra of the mist (except Byakugan of course), and the damage output of this derived jutsu would be distributed in 3 posts
[quote][b]First Post[/b]
Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage to any living being 2 ranks or lower w/ burning through 3 layers of clothing / S-rank armor would have 2 posts of Minor 2nd-degree tissue damage
[b]Second Post[/b]
Moderate 2nd-degree tissue damage towards any living being 2 ranks or lower
[b]Third Post[/b]
Major 1st-degree tissue damage [/quote]

Burning Edge:
Name: エッジを燃やす {Burning Edge}
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A-rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Boil Release
Range: -
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown: /
Description:
Coating any weapon the user has with Boil Release chakra, Burning Edge enables the strikes of the weapon that connect to the opponent by any weapon to suffer major 2nd/minor 3rd degree of burns.
If the strike hits clothing, 3 to 4 layers of clothing is burned upon contact.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] エッジを燃やす {Burning Edge}
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] A-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Boil Release
[b]Range:[/b] -
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Cooldown:[/b] /
[b]Description:[/b]<br>Coating any weapon the user has with Boil Release chakra, [b]Burning Edge[/b] enables the strikes of the weapon that connect to the opponent by any weapon to suffer major 2nd/minor 3rd degree of burns.<br> If the strike hits clothing, 3 to 4 layers of clothing is burned upon contact.


S-Rank
Corrosive Grasp:
Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Grasp
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: S rank
Type: Supplementary
Element: Futton
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts.
Cooldown: Duration.
Description:
Corrosive Grasp is a terrifying technique that can be used as a last resort in Close Combat. Concentrating the user's chakra and condensing it into liquid acid-like chakra, the user can gather the chakra inside of the user to raise the temperature of the acid, making it seem as if the user itself is melting. The user's physical body then turns into a gel-like substance in which it is released from the user's body, which is capable of burning those that touch the user. The extent damage of those who touch the user is extended to a body part if the upper body or lower body comes in contact. If full-body contact, the intended target suffers Total Incineration. In addition, if the user touches any physical substance, the substance itself is burned, or melted if severe contact for a long period of time. The mist chakra is also spread from the touched area, eluding the air with high-temperature acid that travels within a 15-meter radius. Since the user is a humanoid gel, he is unable to use any jutsu until the deactivation of this technique.

Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Corrosive Grasp
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] S rank
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts.
[b]Cooldown:[/b] Duration.
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Corrosive Grasp[/b] is a terrifying technique that can be used as a last resort in Close Combat. Concentrating the user's chakra and condensing it into liquid acid-like chakra, the user can gather the chakra inside of the user to raise the temperature of the acid, making it seem as if the user itself is melting. The user's physical body then turns into a gel-like substance in which it is released from the user's body, which is capable of burning those that touch the user. The extent damage of those who touch the user is extended to a body part if the upper body or lower body comes in contact. If full-body contact, the intended target suffers Total Incineration. In addition, if the user touches any physical substance, the substance itself is burned, or melted if severe contact for a long period of time. The mist chakra is also spread from the touched area, eluding the air with high-temperature acid that travels within a 15-meter radius. Since the user is a humanoid gel, he is unable to use any jutsu until the deactivation of this technique.

Boil Release: Corrosive Blind I am confused on what exactly you trying to do here. You mentioned ‘blinding the enemy’ or ‘damaging their eyesight’, can you word it better/coherently. Cooldown is not needed

Boil Release: Corrosive Grasp: Need an activatiion. When it comes to burning through stuff, change the wording to ‘except chakra enhanced substance’. Also, does the mist, which spreads, does anything? Cooldown is not needed.

Boil Release: Steam Consolation:Corrosive Mist does two ranks lower damage and interacts once per post at a rank lower.

Mist Masterful: Range need to be ‘5 meter radius’. Speciality needs to be ‘Ninjutsu’ not ‘Kekkai Genkai’

Great Dragon Bullet ½ approved
Burning Edge: ½ approved

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8Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Fri Jun 28, 2019 12:14 am

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S-rank
CHANGES MADE
Corrosive Blind
Corrosive Grasp
Mist Masterful Body

Steam Consolation:
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9Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Fri Jun 28, 2019 9:35 pm

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Jurou


S-rank
CHANGES MADE
Steam Consolation


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10Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Sun Jul 07, 2019 1:57 am

Yasubei

Yasubei


C-rank
Jurou wrote:D-rank
Mist Masterful Body:
Name: 沸騰:霧状見事体 {Futton: Ceata Maiestrie Corp ~ Boil Release: Mist Masterful Body}
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary
Element: Boil Release
Range: 5-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: Instantaneous
Description: This technique is used by all Osada clan users and is automatically activated with -10 chakra cost and the Boar Hand Seal performed. It is simply described as making the Osada user creating liquid acid-like chakra from thin air within a 5-meter radius from the user, where most are produced from their mouth. The user can create vast quantities of the substance without a present water source, enabling the clan to create high-level Boil Release techniques with the Liquid Acid variation at any given time.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] 沸騰:霧状見事体 {Futton: Ceata Maiestrie Corp ~ Boil Release: Mist Masterful Body}
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Boil Release
[b]Range:[/b] 5-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] Instantaneous
[b]Description:[/b] This technique is used by all Osada clan users and is automatically activated with -10 chakra cost and the Boar Hand Seal performed. It is simply described as making the Osada user creating liquid acid-like chakra from thin air within a 5-meter radius from the user, where most are produced from their mouth. The user can create vast quantities of the substance without a present water source, enabling the clan to create high-level Boil Release techniques with the Liquid Acid variation at any given time.

B-RANK

Great Dragon Bullet:
Name: Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet (Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: Futton
Range: 60-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 2 post
Description:
Great Dragon Bullet is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra, which they hold for a few seconds. They then exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a Chinese Dragon Head which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. On impact, the mist will explode towards the object it hit, devouring it in the mist. The mist will cause moderate second-degree burns on the surrounding area within 15 meters and will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet ([i]Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] 60-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 2 post
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Great Dragon Bullet[/b] is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra, which they hold for a few seconds. They then exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a Chinese Dragon Head which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. On impact, the mist will explode towards the object it hit, devouring it in the mist. The mist will cause moderate second-degree burns on the surrounding area within 15 meters and will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target

Corrosive Blind:

Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Blind (Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-rank
Type: Offensive
Element: Futton
Range: 5 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Description:
Corrosive Blind is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing mist onto the victim's face, possibly blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a max speed of 85m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Corrosive Blind ([i]Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] 5 meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Corrosive Blind[/b] is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing mist onto the victim's face, possibly blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a max speed of 85m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.

Mist Masterful Body: Not Approved - Firstly I need you to switch to the new jutsu template Which will mean moving your hand seal and changing your duration to one post. This jutsu needs to have the -10 chakra cost removed. If the -10 is a drawback this jutsu already has no max or mid effects so that seems unnecessary. If it is stating that the jutsu should cost ten chakra less it still needs to be removed. If it is denoting the chakra consumption of the technique, -10 is standard for a D-Rank, so it need not be included. That being said this is effectively an E-Rank jutsu, so I’d like the jutsu to reflect that. Additionally this doesn’t use either of the elemental rules for Boil release, so I’d like you change the element. Most importantly I this jutsu cannot appear within or around someone instantly especially not at D-Rank. I need a rate of speed at which your chakra travels there to create this effect if it is going to appear out of thin air.

Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet: Not Approved - This jutsu doesn’t use the rules for Boil release, so I’d prefer if the element was changed or the values be changed to align with the ones laid out for the Osada clan. Additionally remove the “which they hold for a few seconds” and list a size for the dragon head.

Boil Release: Corrosive Blind: Not Approved - Almost perfect you just need to use the right template and the jutsu needs to specify that your using corrosive mist and specify the damage value. Additionally since there is a supplementary value I would like you to list “Supplementary” in the type alongside “Offensive”.


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11Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Sun Jul 07, 2019 10:08 pm

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S-rank
MIST MASTERFUL BODY (NOW ACID TOUCH) & GREAT DRAGON BULLET
Changed Mist Masterful Body to Acid Touch

Damage value has been changed & dragon size added for GDB

CORROSIVE BLIND
Changed effects around CB


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12Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Mon Jul 08, 2019 8:59 pm

Yasubei

Yasubei


C-rank
Jurou wrote:
CLAN JUTSU

Skilled Mist Technique:
Name: 沸遁・巧霧の術 (Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu ~ Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique)
Canon/Custom: Canon.
Rank: A.
Type: Offensive.
Element: Futton.
Range: Long range (<50m)
Specialty: Ninjutsu.
Duration: 6 posts. -10 chakra per post after.
Cooldown: 9 posts.
Description: The user creates a cloud of mist which she releases from their mouth. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that if a B-rank or higher Wind Release jutsu is used on it, the mist can be cleared completely. C-rank Fuuton can reverse the post count by 1, replacing some of the acids with regular air.

This technique follows a damage scale per post. If armor is of higher rank than a post's exposure can melt, the area that the armor protects isn't affected.

  • Direct exposure (1 post): The skin begins to feel very irritated. The targets' clothes begin to crumble away into nothing, up to 2 layers. Targets begin to cough from the ingestion of the mist. C-rank armors are rendered useless.
       
  • 2 posts: 3 more layers of the target's clothing are dissolved. The skin itself starts to melt. B-rank armors are neutralized, and targets have severe breathing difficulty.
       
  • 3 posts: The majority of the target's skin has melted, partially or completely exposing the muscle. The eyes, if not covered, will have suffered extreme damage as well. The muscle begins to be affected by the acid, and the lungs also start to melt from the inside out. A-rank armors and even defensive jutsu are useless at this point. If not rushed out of the mist at this point, the damage could be irreparable.
       
  • 4 posts: The lungs having melted, the target's insides begin to melt, causing widespread pain and damage. Only those of A-rank or above that are Strong-Willed or those of S-rank could even hope to be moving at this rank. S-rank jutsu and armor can be melted through by this time. The target begins to die of oxygen starvation, if anything, at this point.
       
  • 5 posts: Flesh begins to melt off of the bone. Most targets without an S-rank or higher regenerative jutsu active will die at this stage. SS-rank armor or jutsu will fail to protect targets from anything now.

Code:
[b]Name:[/b] 沸遁・巧霧の術 (Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu ~ Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique)
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Canon.
[b]Rank:[/b] A.
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive.
[b]Element:[/b] Futton.
[b]Range:[/b] Long range (<50m)
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu.
[b]Duration:[/b] 6 posts. -10 chakra per post after.
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 9 posts.
[b]Description:[/b] The user creates a cloud of mist which she releases from their mouth. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that if a B-rank or higher Wind Release jutsu is used on it, the mist can be cleared completely. C-rank Fuuton can reverse the post count by 1, replacing some of the acids with regular air.

This technique follows a damage scale per post. If armor is of higher rank than a post's exposure can melt, the area that the armor protects isn't affected.
[list]
[*]Direct exposure (1 post): The skin begins to feel very irritated. The targets' clothes begin to crumble away into nothing, up to 2 layers. Targets begin to cough from the ingestion of the mist. C-rank armors are rendered useless.
    
[*]2 posts: 3 more layers of the target's clothing are dissolved. The skin itself starts to melt. B-rank armors are neutralized, and targets have severe breathing difficulty.
    
[*]3 posts: The majority of the target's skin has melted, partially or completely exposing the muscle. The eyes, if not covered, will have suffered extreme damage as well. The muscle begins to be affected by the acid, and the lungs also start to melt from the inside out. A-rank armors and even defensive jutsu are useless at this point. If not rushed out of the mist at this point, the damage could be irreparable.
    
[*]4 posts: The lungs having melted, the target's insides begin to melt, causing widespread pain and damage. Only those of A-rank or above that are Strong-Willed or those of S-rank could even hope to be moving at this rank. S-rank jutsu and armor can be melted through by this time. The target begins to die of oxygen starvation, if anything, at this point.
    
[*]5 posts: Flesh begins to melt off of the bone. Most targets without an S-rank or higher regenerative jutsu active will die at this stage. SS-rank armor or jutsu will fail to protect targets from anything now.
[/list]

Revamped Skilled Mist Technique:
Name: Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique (沸遁・巧霧の術 ~ Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: S
Type: Offensive.
Element: Futton (Corrosive Mist)
Range: 100-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu.
Duration: 3 posts
Hand Seals: Horse
Description: The user creates a 75-meter cloud of mist which is released from their mouth, traveling at 100m/s within a 100-meter radius. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that it is resisted easily by physical techniques, (such as an earth wall), interacting as if one rank lower. Corrosive mist-type attacks such as this can be dispersed easily as if any other cloud of fog; as such, Fūton acts as if it were one rank higher when interacting with it and can forcibly interact with and prematurely end Futton techniques, where other types of techniques cannot.

Since the pH levels of this technique are considered hazardous at pH=0 - being battery acid or hydrochloric acid, this technique increases its damage by 1 rank higher for living beings/items at Moderate 3rd-Degree tissue damage and other jutsu at the same rank of Moderate 4th-degree tissue damage.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique (沸遁・巧霧の術 ~ [i]Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Canon
[b]Rank:[/b] S
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive.
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 100-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu.
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Horse
[b]Description:[/b] The user creates a 75-meter cloud of mist which is released from their mouth, traveling at 100m/s within a 100-meter radius. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that it is resisted easily by physical techniques, (such as an earth wall), interacting as if one rank lower. Corrosive mist-type attacks such as this can be dispersed easily as if any other cloud of fog; as such, Fūton acts as if it were one rank higher when interacting with it and can forcibly interact with and prematurely end Futton techniques, where other types of techniques cannot.

Since the pH levels of this technique are considered hazardous at pH=0 - being battery acid or hydrochloric acid, this technique increases its damage by 1 rank higher for living beings/items at Moderate 3rd-Degree tissue damage and other jutsu at the same rank of Moderate 4th-degree tissue damage.

Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique: Not Approved - This jutsu either has one max effect or one mid effect too many, depending on which radius you want. Pick a radius unless you’re saying it is a 75 m radius cloud that expands at 100 m/s and can travel anywhere within a 100 m radius of the user. In which case I would simply say: “...creates a 75 m radius cloud that grows and travels at 100 m/s and must remain within 25 meters of the user.” Additionally if you’re gonna use the corrosive mist rules for your benefit you’ve gotta take all of the drawbacks too. They have to do damage of two ranks lower. In this case specifically, Moderate 2nd degree burns. One more flavor thing: “...capable of melting any defense...” this is technically not true. It is possible to make a defensive jutsu that can tank three S-Ranks (or A Ranks if they are solid defenses.) that being said they are so rare this sentence is probably fine to be kept.


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13Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Tue Jul 09, 2019 12:43 am

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SKILLED MIST
I'll take off the 75m radius then. Makes no point in that sense.

And the "capable of melting any defense..." albeit it does interact with items as if it was 2 ranks lower but the damage builds up over time within the 3 post duration, so it's possible but I'll delete the little sentence.


Changed the damage value for Skilled Mist


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14Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Fri Jul 19, 2019 4:30 pm

Fuyuko

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Jurou wrote:D-rank
Boil Release -  Acid Touch:
Name: Boil Release: Acid Touch (煮えリリース: 酸タッチ ~Futton: Ririisu Santacchi)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Element: Boil Release (Liquid Acid)
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Hand Seals: Rat
Description:
Acid Touch is how it sounds - a jutsu that created to burn the target when the user touches the target. The user focuses the chakra pathways to the hands, converting the chakra to envelop the hands with acid-like liquid. Anytime that the user touches the opponent's skin, the target is dealt with minor 2nd-degree tissue damage for 1 post, minor 1st degree for the second post, and then sunburn damage for the last post. This technique cannot burn through layers of clothing or armor.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Acid Touch (煮えリリース: 酸タッチ ~[i]Futton: Ririisu Santacchi[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Boil Release (Liquid Acid)
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Rat
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Acid Touch[/b] is how it sounds - a jutsu that created to burn the target when the user touches the target. The user focuses the chakra pathways to the hands, converting the chakra to envelop the hands with acid-like liquid. Anytime that the user touches the opponent's skin, the target is dealt with minor 2nd-degree tissue damage for 1 post, minor 1st degree for the second post, and then sunburn damage for the last post. This technique cannot burn through layers of clothing or armor.

B-RANK

Great Dragon Bullet:
Name: Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet (Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: Futton (Liquid Acid / Corrosive Mist)
Range: 20-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 post
Hand Seals: Boar - Rat
Description:
Great Dragon Bullet is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra. Then, they exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a 10 ft tall dragon which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. When the dragon crashes upon the target, it will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target and the dragon when it crashes, causing a fog of mist-like chakra to corrode the area. The mist will surround the area within 20 meters, inflicting sunburn damage for 3 posts.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet ([i]Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Liquid Acid / Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 20-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts.
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Boar - Rat
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Great Dragon Bullet[/b] is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra. Then, they exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a 10 ft tall dragon which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. When the dragon crashes upon the target, it will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target and the dragon when it crashes, causing a fog of mist-like chakra to corrode the area. The mist will surround the area within 20 meters, inflicting sunburn damage for 3 posts.

Corrosive Blind:

Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Blind (Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-rank
Type: Offensive / Supplementary
Element: Futton (Liquid Acid)
Range: 5 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Hand Seals: Horse
Description:
Corrosive Blind is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing acid onto the victim's face, possibly inflicting minor 4th-degree tissue damage for 1 post and moderate 1st-degree tissue damage for the remaining 2 posts, blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a max speed of 85m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Corrosive Blind ([i]Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive / Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] 5 meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Horse
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Corrosive Blind[/b] is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing acid onto the victim's face, possibly inflicting minor 4th-degree tissue damage for 1 post and moderate 1st-degree tissue damage for the remaining 2 posts, blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a max speed of 85m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.

Jurou wrote:
CLAN JUTSU

Skilled Mist Technique:
Name: 沸遁・巧霧の術 (Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu ~ Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique)
Canon/Custom: Canon.
Rank: A.
Type: Offensive.
Element: Futton.
Range: Long range (<50m)
Specialty: Ninjutsu.
Duration: 6 posts. -10 chakra per post after.
Cooldown: 9 posts.
Description: The user creates a cloud of mist which she releases from their mouth. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that if a B-rank or higher Wind Release jutsu is used on it, the mist can be cleared completely. C-rank Fuuton can reverse the post count by 1, replacing some of the acids with regular air.

This technique follows a damage scale per post. If armor is of higher rank than a post's exposure can melt, the area that the armor protects isn't affected.

  • Direct exposure (1 post): The skin begins to feel very irritated. The targets' clothes begin to crumble away into nothing, up to 2 layers. Targets begin to cough from the ingestion of the mist. C-rank armors are rendered useless.
       
  • 2 posts: 3 more layers of the target's clothing are dissolved. The skin itself starts to melt. B-rank armors are neutralized, and targets have severe breathing difficulty.
       
  • 3 posts: The majority of the target's skin has melted, partially or completely exposing the muscle. The eyes, if not covered, will have suffered extreme damage as well. The muscle begins to be affected by the acid, and the lungs also start to melt from the inside out. A-rank armors and even defensive jutsu are useless at this point. If not rushed out of the mist at this point, the damage could be irreparable.
       
  • 4 posts: The lungs having melted, the target's insides begin to melt, causing widespread pain and damage. Only those of A-rank or above that are Strong-Willed or those of S-rank could even hope to be moving at this rank. S-rank jutsu and armor can be melted through by this time. The target begins to die of oxygen starvation, if anything, at this point.
       
  • 5 posts: Flesh begins to melt off of the bone. Most targets without an S-rank or higher regenerative jutsu active will die at this stage. SS-rank armor or jutsu will fail to protect targets from anything now.

Code:
[b]Name:[/b] 沸遁・巧霧の術 (Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu ~ Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique)
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Canon.
[b]Rank:[/b] A.
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive.
[b]Element:[/b] Futton.
[b]Range:[/b] Long range (<50m)
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu.
[b]Duration:[/b] 6 posts. -10 chakra per post after.
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 9 posts.
[b]Description:[/b] The user creates a cloud of mist which she releases from their mouth. This mist has extremely corrosive properties, capable of melting any defense if given the opportunity. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that if a B-rank or higher Wind Release jutsu is used on it, the mist can be cleared completely. C-rank Fuuton can reverse the post count by 1, replacing some of the acids with regular air.

This technique follows a damage scale per post. If armor is of higher rank than a post's exposure can melt, the area that the armor protects isn't affected.
[list]
[*]Direct exposure (1 post): The skin begins to feel very irritated. The targets' clothes begin to crumble away into nothing, up to 2 layers. Targets begin to cough from the ingestion of the mist. C-rank armors are rendered useless.
    
[*]2 posts: 3 more layers of the target's clothing are dissolved. The skin itself starts to melt. B-rank armors are neutralized, and targets have severe breathing difficulty.
    
[*]3 posts: The majority of the target's skin has melted, partially or completely exposing the muscle. The eyes, if not covered, will have suffered extreme damage as well. The muscle begins to be affected by the acid, and the lungs also start to melt from the inside out. A-rank armors and even defensive jutsu are useless at this point. If not rushed out of the mist at this point, the damage could be irreparable.
    
[*]4 posts: The lungs having melted, the target's insides begin to melt, causing widespread pain and damage. Only those of A-rank or above that are Strong-Willed or those of S-rank could even hope to be moving at this rank. S-rank jutsu and armor can be melted through by this time. The target begins to die of oxygen starvation, if anything, at this point.
    
[*]5 posts: Flesh begins to melt off of the bone. Most targets without an S-rank or higher regenerative jutsu active will die at this stage. SS-rank armor or jutsu will fail to protect targets from anything now.
[/list]

Revamped Skilled Mist Technique:
Name: Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique (沸遁・巧霧の術 ~ Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: S
Type: Offensive.
Element: Futton (Corrosive Mist)
Range: 100-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu.
Duration: 3 posts
Hand Seals: Horse
Description: The user creates a cloud of mist which is released from their mouth, traveling at 100m/s within a 100-meter radius. This mist has extremely corrosive properties. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that it is resisted easily by physical techniques, (such as an earth wall), interacting as if one rank lower. Corrosive mist-type attacks such as this can be dispersed easily as if any other cloud of fog; as such, Fūton acts as if it were one rank higher when interacting with it and can forcibly interact with and prematurely end Futton techniques, where other types of techniques cannot.

Since the pH levels of this technique are considered hazardous at pH=0 - being battery acid or hydrochloric acid, this technique inflicts damage of 2 ranks lower for living beings/items at Moderate 2nd-Degree tissue damage and other jutsu of 1 rank or lower at Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Skilled Mist Technique (沸遁・巧霧の術 ~ [i]Futton: Kōmu no Jutsu[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Canon
[b]Rank:[/b] S
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive.
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 100-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu.
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Horse
[b]Description:[/b] The user creates a cloud of mist which is released from their mouth, traveling at 100m/s within a 100-meter radius. This mist has extremely corrosive properties. The technique has an inherent disadvantage in its effects that are indiscriminate, limiting its usage to areas that do not contain allies. In the event that the mist escapes the containment area, the user can adjust the pH level of the mist to safer levels. Though the mist is corrosive to all around it, the user seems to be immune to it. This jutsu also has the weakness that it is resisted easily by physical techniques, (such as an earth wall), interacting as if one rank lower. Corrosive mist-type attacks such as this can be dispersed easily as if any other cloud of fog; as such, Fūton acts as if it were one rank higher when interacting with it and can forcibly interact with and prematurely end Futton techniques, where other types of techniques cannot.

Since the pH levels of this technique are considered hazardous at pH=0 - being battery acid or hydrochloric acid, this technique inflicts damage of 2 ranks lower for living beings/items at Moderate 2nd-Degree tissue damage and other jutsu of 1 rank or lower at Moderate 3rd-degree tissue damage.

Acid Touch - approved
Great Dragon Bullet - Bad imperial numbers! (change it to like... 5m or even 10m and consider it approved)
Corrosive Blind - Too many values. Max speed and damage + a utility effect.
Skilled Mist - approved


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15Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Fri Jul 19, 2019 10:09 pm

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S-rank
Corrosive Blind
Damage output follows the Boil Release Liquid Acid damage values, but I lowered the damage to minimum B-rank for the first post and lowered the speed to 50 m/s


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16Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) Empty Re: Jurou Osada (Jutsu Update) on Wed Jul 31, 2019 10:43 pm

Chiaki

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A-rank
Jurou wrote:B-RANK

Great Dragon Bullet:
Name: Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet (Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Element: Futton (Liquid Acid / Corrosive Mist)
Range: 20-meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 post
Hand Seals: Boar - Rat
Description:
Great Dragon Bullet is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra. Then, they exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a 10 ft tall dragon which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. When the dragon crashes upon the target, it will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target and the dragon when it crashes, causing a fog of mist-like chakra to corrode the area. The mist will surround the area within 10 meters, inflicting sunburn damage for 3 posts.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Great Dragon Bullet ([i]Futton: Gurētodoragonburetto ~ グレートドラゴンの弾丸[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] Futton (Liquid Acid / Corrosive Mist)
[b]Range:[/b] 20-meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts.
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Boar - Rat
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Great Dragon Bullet[/b] is a technique that is used after performing both the Boar and Rat handseal. The user inhales deeply, flooding their throat with an immensely thick layer of chakra. Then, they exhale this chakra, converting it into the liquid acid as it leaves their lips. The liquid acid takes the form of a 10 ft tall dragon which rapidly flies towards the intended target at 50m/s. When the dragon crashes upon the target, it will cause minor third-degree burns on contact with the intended target and the dragon when it crashes, causing a fog of mist-like chakra to corrode the area. The mist will surround the area within 10 meters, inflicting sunburn damage for 3 posts.

Corrosive Blind:

Name: Boil Release: Corrosive Blind (Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B-rank
Type: Offensive / Supplementary
Element: Futton (Liquid Acid)
Range: 5 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Hand Seals: Horse
Description:
Corrosive Blind is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing acid onto the victim's face, possibly inflicting moderate 2nd-degree tissue damage for 1 post and moderate 1st-degree tissue damage for the remaining 2 posts, blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a speed of 50m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.
Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Boil Release: Corrosive Blind ([i]Futton: Fushoku-sei Buraindo ~ 腐食性ブラインド[/i])
[b]Canon/Custom:[/b] Custom
[b]Rank:[/b] B-rank
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive / Supplementary
[b]Element:[/b] Futton
[b]Range:[/b] 5 meters
[b]Specialty:[/b] Ninjutsu
[b]Duration:[/b] 3 posts
[b]Hand Seals:[/b] Horse
[b]Description:[/b]
[b]Corrosive Blind[/b] is simply used to blind the target mostly at close range. Raising the corrosive acidity temperature of the jet-like vapor for burning effects, it is explained as simply spewing acid onto the victim's face, possibly inflicting minor 2nd-degree tissue damage for 1 post and moderate 1st-degree tissue damage for the remaining 2 posts, blinding the eyesight for exactly 3 posts. The vapor is fired at a speed of 50m/s. It is more so versatile when the range of using the technique is up close since the jutsu is being shot at in a straight line.

1/2 approved, I don't see why any of this wouldn't be allowed, it's all within the parameters.

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